The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016.
Sample Response
The table illustrates the performance of three different branches of a chain of restaurants in three different locations in Vancouver for the year 2016. It is evident that the best performer is the branch in Georgia Street, which with 854 transactions a day on average has at least 100 more transactions than Dunsmuir Street and more than double from Drake Street. Georgia Street is also ahead in terms of average transaction value (ATV), with $10.69 per transaction compared to Dunsmuir Street’s $5.61 and Drake Street’s $9.02.
On average, eat-in and take-away transactions are almost equal in each restaurant, with take-away transactions slightly exceeding eat-in transactionsending slightly ahead in two of them. Drake Street is the only exception, with eat-in transactions exceeding take-away transactions by 10transactions surpassing take-away by 10.
The table also showsalso gives us information about the most popular item in each branch, revealing that the eating habit of customers in each area are widely varied: Georgia Street’s best seller is Chicken Burger, while Dunsmuir Street’s customers favour Chicken Wings, and Drake Street’s customers prefer Chicken Pasta.
Overall, it is clear that the Georgia StreetStreet’s branch is the company’s best-performing branchmost profitable branch, with the highest number of transactions and ATV. Drake Street, on the other hand, records the fewest transactionslags far behind, despite the fact that its ATV is higher than Dunsmuir Street.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response is comprehensive, easy to follow, and supports its comparisons with almost all of the table's key figures. The principal limitation is the unsupported description of Georgia Street as the most profitable branch, since the table gives sales indicators rather than costs or profit. The highest-priority improvement is to keep conclusions strictly within the data and polish a few awkward grammatical and lexical choices.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response accurately compares transaction counts, values, service modes, and popular items, but the claim about profitability goes beyond the information provided.
Describe Georgia Street as having the highest sales indicators rather than the highest profit, and retain the otherwise strong numerical comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically sequenced into clear thematic paragraphs, and comparisons within and between branches are easy to follow.
Place the overall summary immediately after the introduction to foreground the main pattern before presenting detailed comparisons.
Lexical Resource
A broad and generally precise range of language supports detailed comparisons, with only occasional awkward collocations such as 'more than double from' and 'ending slightly ahead'.
Refine comparative phrasing by using forms such as 'more than twice the figure for Drake Street' and 'slightly exceeded'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are handled with good control and most structures are accurate, though a few errors occur in agreement, possession, and comparative construction.
Proofread forms such as 'customers' eating habits vary', 'the Georgia Street branch', and 'more than double the number at Drake Street'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016.
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