The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to China and India.
Sample Response
The given pie charts depict information about the food consumptionutilisation of food by the population of the world in 2008 and also show a comparison of food consumption between two countriesamong two different nations in the same year.
Overall, it is conspicuous that a large amount of processed food was consumed by the world’s population compared to India and China. However, more in both these nations in a given period, nuts and seeds are eaten by more in both these nations.
First, utilisation of animal food was similar worldwide (26%)was essentially worldwide (27%) and in India (27%)India(26%). By contrastAt the same time, China accounted for 15%less than 20 per cent. The percentage of the average consumption of vegetables and fruitraw material like vegetables and fruits was almost one-thirdalmost third in China. On the other hand, vegetables and fruitthese raw materials accounted foronly contribute 23% of food consumption in Indiaof the total diet of Indians and 29% of global food consumption29 % of the world’s population.
People in this world are 41% processed food that was highest consumed food in 2008 compared to both the given nations. India used 39%. Processed food whereas Chinese people ate 5% less than India. Besides this, nuts and seeds consumed worldwidenuts and seeds ate by the world was just 4% (the lowest figure shown). By comparison(lowest among all the types) on the other hand, the figure for India was 11%Indians ate almost 11 percent, while people in China consumedbut chineses consumed 19%.19 %…
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response selects a broad range of relevant figures and makes useful comparisons across the world, China, and India, so the visual content is largely covered accurately. Its main limitation is frequent loss of grammatical control, especially in the overview and final paragraph, where fragments and malformed clauses reduce clarity. Prioritise complete subject-verb structures and proofread every comparative sentence while retaining the accurate data selection.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides an overview and covers nearly all categories with largely accurate figures, though the world and India animal-food values are reversed by one point.
Check every label and percentage against the charts and state the two main overall contrasts in complete, unambiguous sentences.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses from an overview to comparisons by food category, but broken sentences and awkward linking disrupt the final paragraph.
Organise the details into complete comparison sentences and avoid splitting a clause after a percentage, as in 'India used 39%. Processed food'.
Lexical Resource
There is an adequate range of topic vocabulary, but inaccurate collocations and word forms such as 'people are 41% processed food' reduce precision.
Use controlled data-reporting phrases such as 'processed food accounted for 41%' and 'Chinese consumers' throughout.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex sentences are accurate, but frequent fragments, agreement problems, and malformed passive structures cause noticeable difficulty for the reader.
Build each comparison around a clear subject and finite verb, then proofread plurals, agreement, and passive forms before submitting.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to China and India.
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