You are looking for a full-time job, and recently you saw a job opening in an advertisement. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: - introduce yourself - explain what sort of job you would like to do and say what experience and skills you have
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply for the assistant manager post at your hotel, The Adventure Innin your Hotel - The Adventure Inn, which you advertisedthat you have advertised in a local newspaper recently. I would really appreciate it if you could spare some of your timeprecious time to discuss my application furtherfurther discuss my candidacy in a formal interview. I would like to work as an assistant manager, a role that would enable mework as an assistant manager that would enable me to work closely with the hotel staff and with the management. This way, I would be able to perform the role effectivelybest serve my position on the one hand and gainlearn valuable experience on the other hand. I have graduatedcompleted my graduation from City University in 2023 and I majored in Tourism and Hospitalitymy major was Tourism and Hospitality. Since then, I have workedAfterwards, I have worked for two four-star hotels and my current job as an assistant manager at the Gilbert Hotelhotel because I have experience in staff supervision, guest relations, and daily operationsmakes me a suitable candidate for the post. I do not see enough career growth opportunitiesopportunity with my current employer and that is why I would likethat's why would like to change jobsswitch my job. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Should you need any further details, please do not hesitate to call me. Yours sincerely, Paul Jenkins
Why this response received Band 7.0
Your letter has a clear professional purpose and presents relevant education and hotel experience in a logical sequence. Its main weakness is that specific management skills are not developed, while one-block formatting, awkward phrasing, and several grammar errors reduce polish. Prioritize adding concrete examples of staff supervision, guest relations, scheduling, or complaint handling, then organize the content into clear paragraphs and proofread sentence subjects and clauses.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The letter applies for the job, identifies the assistant manager role, and gives education and experience. However, the introduction is brief and the skills bullet is underdeveloped because the writer lists experience more than specific skills.
Add two or three concrete skills, such as staff supervision, guest relations, scheduling, or complaint handling.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter has a clear progression from application to desired role, qualifications, reason for changing jobs, and closing. It is one block and some sentences are long or loosely connected.
Use separate paragraphs for application purpose, desired role, experience and skills, and interview request.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary fits a job application, with useful words such as “candidacy”, “Tourism and Hospitality”, and “suitable candidate”. Some phrases are unnatural or inflated, such as “precious time” and “learn valuable experience”.
Use precise professional language and avoid overly flattering phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response is understandable and uses some complex sentences, but accuracy is affected by relative clause errors, missing subjects, article problems, and tense choices.
Check clauses after job titles and make sure each sentence has a clear subject, especially in “that’s why would like”.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are looking for a full-time job, and recently you saw a job opening in an advertisement. Write a letter to the company. In your letter:
- introduce yourself
- explain what sort of job you would like to do and say what experience and skills you have
Your response
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