You are going on a short training course at a college in Green mount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: - explain your situation - describe the accommodation you require - say when you will need it You should write at least words.
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
Greetings of the day! I, Jenny Jackson, student ID numberstudent ID – ILT-6556, am writing this letter in order to request that you arrangerequest you to arrange accommodationa lodging facility for me, as I have enrolled for the Irish Language training course for only one monthfor a month only atin St. Xavier’s College, Greenmount, Northern IrelandIsland.
At the outsetonset, let me share with you the specifics about my stay. Although the duration of my course is short, I would like to live alone without interruptionsI wanted to reside alone without any interference, so that I can dedicate time to my studies. Additionally, as this language course is a mandatory requirement for my future degree coursea mandatory criterion to be fulfilled in my further degree course, I aim to get good grades without any distractionsdistraction.
Further, I humbly request if you can please be able to provide a single furnished room with a kitchenette and attached bathroom. I do not mind if the accommodation is on any floor, provided thatif it is securesecured and within walking distancewithin a walking distance from my college.
Finally, this is to inform you that my course will commence on April 2nd, 2021. However, to get settled and acquainted with the college premises, I will arrive on 31st March and continue my stay till 5th May 2021. When arranging the accommodationWhile finalizing the housing facilities, I would be grateful if you could attachI will be thankful if you can please attach the pictures as well as other required details in your email. You can also reach me at +44 714 2346489.
I hope you will consider my requestthe plight and reply as soon as possible.
KindWith regards,
Jenny Jackson
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter’s strongest feature is its thorough coverage of the accommodation request, with clear dates and specific room preferences presented in a logical sequence. Its main limitation is a pattern of awkward or overly formal phrasing that sometimes makes the tone sound unnatural. The highest-priority improvement is to use simpler, more idiomatic request language while retaining the useful supporting detail.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear, all three bullet points are covered, and relevant details about the course, room, and dates are supplied.
Maintain the formal register while replacing melodramatic or unnecessary details with a more direct request for accommodation information.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically through the situation, accommodation requirements, and dates, with effective paragraphing.
Use fewer formulaic transitions such as ‘At the onset,’ ‘Further,’ and ‘Finally’ so the progression feels more natural.
Lexical Resource
The letter shows a good range of vocabulary, but several collocations and word choices are unnatural or imprecise.
Prefer idiomatic choices such as ‘accommodation,’ ‘secure,’ and ‘walking distance of the college’ over awkward formal expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates meaning clearly, though recurring errors reduce grammatical precision.
Review request and condition structures, especially forms such as ‘I would be grateful if you could’ and ‘provided it is secure.’
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are going on a short training course at a college in Green mount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter:
- explain your situation
- describe the accommodation you require
- say when you will need it You should write at least words.
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