You have recently changed your job and started working for a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: - explain why you have changed your previous job - describe your new job - tell him/her your other news
Sample Response
Dear Jane, I hope you're doing well.Hope you're doing well. It's been so long since I've heard from you. I was thinking of you the other day when I saw my neighbour's garden full of tulips. I am sure you are still a passionate gardener. You'll be glad to hearYou would be glad to hear that I have recently accepted a new jobtaken a job and moved to Ottawa, Canada. As you know, I had been eagerly looking forward to settlingwas eagerly looking forward to settling in OttawaOttowa with my family. When I receivedSo when I got a job offer from a prestigious hospitalone of the prestigious hospitals in Ottawa, I accepted it. I liked my previous job in Ontario but had been stuck in the same position for a long timefor a long and had few opportunitieswas not getting many chances to further my career. That's why I changed my job and so far I find my new responsibilities exciting. I am a general physician at the hospital and I have to examine patientslook after the visiting patients to diagnose illnesses and recommend treatmentdiagnose and suggest treatment of illnesses. Sometimes I need to perform minor surgerydo some minor surgery. I must say that Ottawathis place is absolutely amazing and the people are friendly, kind and accommodating. Aside from that, Ottawa celebrates the Tulip Festival annuallyOttawa is celebrating Tulip Festival annually in May, during the springtime. I know your passion for tulips and gardening. I bet you would like itI bet you would definitely like it here. So far, I’m enjoying my life here and all the new experiences. I hope you cancould visit us soon. How are things back home in the United Kingdom? I am eagerly waiting to hear from you soon. Warm wishes, Eva
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter's strongest feature is its warm, convincing relationship with the reader: it fully explains the career move, describes the new medical role, and adds relevant personal news about Ottawa. The main presentation weakness is that all ideas are compressed into one continuous paragraph, while a few awkward phrases slightly reduce polish. Prioritise clear paragraph breaks for each purpose, then refine the small collocation and tense errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The letter clearly fulfils all three requirements with relevant detail and maintains an engaging, appropriately informal relationship with the friend.
Keep the three required purposes equally easy to locate and trim repeated expressions of enthusiasm to make the response more concise.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically from personal contact to the job change, new role and life in Ottawa, but the complete absence of paragraph breaks weakens organisation.
Create separate paragraphs for the reason for changing jobs, the new responsibilities and the additional personal news and invitation.
Lexical Resource
A broad and generally precise range conveys work, medicine and personal news naturally, with only occasional awkward collocations or spelling slips.
Replace phrases such as 'for a long' and 'suggest treatment of illnesses' with 'for a long time' and 'recommend treatment for illnesses', and spell Ottawa consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide variety of simple and complex structures is used with good control, although a few tense, preposition and phrasing errors remain.
Review isolated forms such as 'Ottawa holds an annual Tulip Festival' and 'I hope you can visit' for more accurate tense and modality.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have recently changed your job and started working for a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter:
- explain why you have changed your previous job
- describe your new job
- tell him/her your other news
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