Your car was hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, you need to explain the following: - when and where you hired the car - describe how the accident happened - what kind of action you took after the accident
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I hiredhave hired a Toyota Altis car on 17th August from your head office located at SerangoonSerangoon, for a period of 15 days. The registration number of the car is SGT 2345D. I am writing to inform you that I was involvedhave been involved in a minor accident earlier today that caused some damagedamages to the car. I was on my way to my office and at the Raffles City junctionRaffle city junction, a car from the opposite direction tried to cross the intersectionsignal while the traffic light was redwhen it was red. Due to his rash driving, his vehicle grazedslightly touched the right side of my car. I tried my best to avoid it, but could not prevent the collisioncould not help much. The driver side's rear-view mirror broke and also led to some scratches on the right side of the car. I reported the incident to the police officer on dutyon-duty police and the officer filed a reporthe lodged a complaint and informed the other driver's insurance company. I am attaching the police report to this letter so that you can review what really happened and make an insurance claimclaim the insurance for the repair costs. I also replacedBut I replaced the rear-view mirrorrearview mirror from the service station as it is essentialvery necessary for driving. I am ready to cooperate fullycooperate regarding this and if you need any further information, I am available onat 98765678. Yours faithfully, Ankit Gupta
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter clearly explains the rental, accident, damage, and follow-up actions in a suitably formal voice, with enough specific detail to make the report useful. Its main weaknesses are the mismatch between the holiday scenario and the claim that the writer was travelling to work, along with an unbroken body paragraph and several awkward expressions. Prioritise maintaining the given situation and grouping the rental, accident, and response details into distinct paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear and all three bullet points are developed, although travelling to the office conflicts with the holiday scenario.
Keep every event consistent with the stated holiday context while retaining the useful details about the accident and subsequent action.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the hire to the collision and response, but the whole body is presented as one dense paragraph.
Use separate paragraphs for the rental background, the accident itself, and the actions taken afterwards.
Lexical Resource
The letter uses a sufficient range of relevant vocabulary, though phrases such as 'some damages' and 'claim the insurance' are imprecise.
Choose more natural collocations such as 'some damage,' 'ran the red light,' and 'make an insurance claim.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the account clearly, despite several article, tense, and possessive-form errors.
Review tense consistency and noun phrases, especially forms such as 'I hired,' 'the driver's side mirror,' and 'at a service station.'
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
Your car was hired from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, you need to explain the following:
- when and where you hired the car
- describe how the accident happened
- what kind of action you took after the accident
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