You have learned that a financial organisation in your city gives money as a loan to students who like to take a part-time course. You are interested to do the course and have decided to take a loan. Write a letter to a local financial organisation. In your letter: - give your qualifications and work experience - give details about the course - explain how this course will help you
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inquire about the student loan that your bank grants to aspiring students or professionals to help them finish skills-development coursesskill development courses on a part-time basisas part-timers. I am a graduate and I majored in physicsmy major is physics. I would like to apply for the loan your bank is offering. I earnedhave earned my bachelor'sbachelor degree from the University of Edinburgh in 2016 and have been working forin a local manufacturing company since then as a junior executive. Now I feel that I need advanced computer skills to advancefurther my career and perform better in my rolebetter perform in my work field. The skill development course that I am planning to enrol in offers a comprehensive six-month-long curriculum intended to developenhance the computing skills of professionals. It includes advanced MS Excel, database programmingDatabase Programming, Computer-aided Design (CAD), and other relevant topicsmany other aspects that a professional in the manufacturing sector can utilise. As the use of computers and software is predominant in our organisation, I would not be able to perform effectivelyexcellently without the skills this course offers. The database concept and Computer-aided Design (CAD) can help me execute my daily tasks in a more efficient manner. To advance my career, I see no alternative but to learn these skillsno alternatives than to learn those. However, I need financial help as this course is expensive. I am hoping that you would disburse the loan so that I can take the course. I need a loan of not more than $3000, and I am willing to repay the loan in monthly instalmentsrepay the monthly instalment incurred from the loan over the next two years. I would really appreciate your consideration and a positive reply. Yours faithfully, Nathan Adam
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter is purposeful and detailed, giving clear information about the writer's qualifications, employment, proposed course, and its career value in an appropriately formal tone. The principal weakness is that a long single paragraph obscures an otherwise logical structure, and a few word choices are unnatural. Organising the request into distinct paragraphs and tightening those expressions would improve professional clarity and impact.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The request is clear, all three bullet points are thoroughly developed, and the formal register suits a financial organisation.
State explicitly that the course will be taken part-time so the request aligns even more precisely with the loan conditions in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information develops in a logical order with clear connections, but presenting the entire letter as one paragraph limits structural clarity.
Separate the purpose and background, course details, career benefits, and loan request into distinct paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a broad, precise range of education, finance, and workplace vocabulary, with only occasional awkward collocations.
Refine expressions such as perform excellently, work field, and no alternatives than to learn those into more idiomatic wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex structures are generally well controlled, although a few tense, article, and comparative-pattern errors remain.
Use the simple past with a finished date and revise forms such as bachelor degree and no alternative but to learn these skills.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have learned that a financial organisation in your city gives money as a loan to students who like to take a part-time course. You are interested to do the course and have decided to take a loan. Write a letter to a local financial organisation. In your letter:
- give your qualifications and work experience
- give details about the course
- explain how this course will help you
Your response
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