You are working for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - Describe why you want to take the course. - Explain how it will be beneficial to the company. - Tell who will be managing your work in your absence.
Sample Response
Dear Mr. Sharma,
I am Jennie, the recruitment manager, writing to request permission to attend a training program for management personnel. The program runs from May 1, 2024, to June 3, 2024, and attracts participants from leading multinational corporations.
Given the evolving nature of recruitmentGiven the evolving recruitment process, this training is designed to equip participants with the currentlatest best practices for effective hiring. The program requires a daily commitment of two to three hours2-3 hours and is entirely free of charge.
As you appreciateunderstand the importance of securing the right talent, I am committed to acquiring these skills and implementing them to enhance our organization’s recruitment process. During my absence, my management team colleagues will handle the tasks assigned to themsome of my tasks, ensuring continuity. We will maintain open communication throughout. Additionally, I will conduct a training session for my team upon my return to share what I have learnedall the acquired knowledge.
I would be grateful for your permission to attend this valuable training program.
Yours sincerely,
Jennie
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response's strongest feature is its professional, well-organized request, supported by relevant details about the course, recruitment benefits, and continuity of work. The main limitation is that the colleague coverage remains vague and the precise relationship between the daily course hours and the writer's absence is not fully explained. The priority is to identify who will assume each responsibility and clarify the practical attendance arrangement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The letter has a clear purpose, an appropriate formal tone, and relevant coverage of all bullet points, with useful explanation of the company's benefit.
Specify which colleague or role will manage the work and explain exactly when the writer will be absent during the course.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is sequenced logically in well-focused paragraphs, and cohesive devices guide the reader smoothly without becoming intrusive.
Make the transition from course benefits to work-cover arrangements even sharper by opening the latter with a distinct planning statement.
Lexical Resource
The response uses varied, precise professional vocabulary, though a few phrases such as “management team colleagues” sound slightly awkward.
Choose more concise workplace collocations, such as “colleagues on the management team,” and avoid mildly inflated phrases where a direct alternative is clearer.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex and simple sentence forms are handled accurately, with controlled punctuation and only minor awkwardness in otherwise clear structures.
Refine the longest sentences by checking modifier placement and parallel structure so dense professional information remains effortless to read.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are working for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
- Describe why you want to take the course.
- Explain how it will be beneficial to the company.
- Tell who will be managing your work in your absence.
Your response
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