You work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - give details of the course - say how the course would be useful - explain how the company could help you do this course.
Sample Response
Dear Martin,Dear Martin I have recently become aware of a course called Social Media Marketing Essentials and I am writing to ask for your support in taking this course. It is a five-day intensive program being offered by the Business Leadership Association and it starts on Monday 15 February. I believe the course would be of great benefit to our company as we have recently been consideringhave been recently considering how to strengthenbuild up our social media presence and attract more customers online. After reading reviews by former participants, I think this social media courseSocial Media course will help me professionally in my role as communications managerin my capacity as Communications Manager and make a real difference to our company. For these reasons, I am requesting paid leave from 15-20 February to attend the course. It would be helpful if other team members did not take leave during these datesat this time; so far nobody else has applied. I believe this will not be a particularly busy time at work, but I am prepared to spend some time working on the evenings during the coursethose evenings if needed. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Best wishes, Neil MacFarlaneBest wishes Neil MacFarlane
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response communicates its request clearly and persuasively, using specific course details and a professional, cooperative tone that suits a manager. The main weakness is its presentation as a single block, which obscures the otherwise sound movement from course information to benefits and practical support. Clear paragraphing and slightly more precise phrasing around the leave dates and staffing arrangements would sharpen the request.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All bullet points are covered with relevant detail, and the request for paid leave is supported by clear professional benefits and practical arrangements.
Clarify the apparent mismatch between a five-day course and the requested leave from 15 to 20 February.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a sensible progression from course details to value for the company and then to the support requested.
Use separate paragraphs for the course, its benefits, and the leave arrangements to strengthen the letter's visual and logical organisation.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a strong range of appropriate workplace vocabulary, including "social media presence," "former participants," and "paid leave."
Refine slightly awkward combinations such as "have been recently considering" to make the wording consistently natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex and simple sentences are combined with strong control, and punctuation supports meaning effectively overall.
Polish the occasional awkward clause connection and maintain consistently accurate punctuation in the greeting and closing.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
- give details of the course
- say how the course would be useful
- explain how the company could help you do this course.
Your response
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