Do you believe that experimentation on animals for scientific purposes is justified? Are there any alternatives to animal experimentation?
Sample Response
Medical science has improved tremendously over the last few decadesover last few decades. The majority of the medicines available in the market have been tested on animalstested on the animals and once satisfactory results have been obtainedonce the satisfactory results have been received, those medicines are approved for human use. Many people question these days is it required to torture animals in the name of medical needs. Experimenting on the animals for scientific purposes has been practised for many yearsadopted since many years so certainly there must be some advantages to itfew advantages of it. Firstly, human life is very important so it would not be a wise step to try medicines directly on humans. Experimenting on animals is a provenproved technique. Scientific researchOur science has discovered that the human body is similar to that of animalsthe human body is similar to the animals. For example, anaesthesiathe anaesthesia, which is used to make animals unconscious, works similarly on humanson the humans. On the other hand, it is definitely inhumane to treat animals as machinestreat animals as a machine. Animals are tortured during the experiments. For instance, to test the nail polish, the chemical is put into a rabbit's eyesinto rabbit's eyes. Because animals cannot speak, we are unable to understand their pain. In a few experimentsIn few of the experiments, the animal's body parts are being cut one by one to capture the record the medicine's effect. Science has progressed in all the directions. So, we surely have a few alternativeswe surely have few alternatives which should be promoted as alternatives to animal experimentationencouraged to alternate animal experimentation. One of them is to use more natural products. If the demand for chemical productsthe chemical product is reduced, such experiments would definitely be reduced. For instance, many cosmetic companies are selling natural beauty products on which it is clearly statednatural beauty products, where it is clearly mentioned that "Not tried on animals". If people increase the use of such products, other cosmetic companies would also try to sell natural products. If we can develop medicines to reduce human pain, we should also create medicines to reduce animals' painanimal’s pain during experiments. I believe that we all have equal rights to live happy and healthy lives on this planet. I would say we should promote a healthier lifestyle to reduce overall use of the medicines.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response offers relevant ethical concerns and concrete examples, and its stance against causing animal suffering becomes apparent. However, the position on whether scientific experimentation is justified remains insufficiently explicit, while the proposed alternatives mostly reduce product demand rather than replace testing methods. State a direct qualified position early, develop genuine scientific alternatives, and organise the argument into clear paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are considered and relevant reasoning is offered, but the position on justification is diffuse and the alternatives only partly answer the need for replacement testing methods.
State a direct position and develop credible scientific alternatives such as cell cultures or computer modelling rather than mainly proposing reduced consumption.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument has a discernible sequence and basic linking, but presenting the entire response as one paragraph weakens organisation and makes shifts between ideas abrupt.
Divide the response into an introduction, focused body paragraphs for justification and alternatives, and a concise conclusion.
Lexical Resource
The writer uses a sufficient range of topic vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices undermine precision.
Correct recurring combinations such as over the last few decades, proven technique, alternatives to animal experimentation, and live happily.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex forms are attempted and meaning remains generally clear, but frequent errors in articles, prepositions, agreement, possession, and sentence construction limit control.
Edit each sentence for complete clause structure and practise article and preposition patterns in common academic noun phrases.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Do you believe that experimentation on animals for scientific purposes is justified? Are there any alternatives to animal experimentation?
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Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.