Children who are brought up in the family that do not have a lot of money are better prepared to deal with problems when they become adults than children who are brought up by wealthy parent. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
Over the past few decades, along with growing interest in child education, people's attention to the family environment where a child is brought up has also significantly increased. Some people have begun to feel that a child who has grown up in a poor family tendstend to be better prepared to deal with problems. In my opinion, however, family environment alone does not greatlymuch influence a child's ability to solve problems.
A child who was born into a poor family would have had more situations where they had to solve a problem or make a decision on their own. This is because in most low-income familiesmost unfortunate families, both parents usually workboth parents are usually working and children face situationschildren are put into situations where they have to take care of themselves. By contrast, due to their wealth, children from wealthy familiesrich children can gain experiences and knowledgeexperience and learn things that children from low-income familiesunfortunate children cannot. For example, they usually go to the best schools and receive a high-quality education therereceive a higher education there, which prepares them better for solving problems in their liveslife.
However, it is widely accepted thatfew would disagree with the fact that each individual is different. That is, problem-solving skillsproblem solving skills come more from life experience. More specifically, the more a person experiencesThat is, the more a person experiences in life, the more they can use that experiencethese experiences to adjust, to adapt and to solve problems they encounter. Personality can also bePersonality also can be a factor in dealing with problems. A person who is optimistic, outgoing, confident and open-minded can assess and solve problemslook at and solve problems more effectively.
As discussed above, nature and nurture have an equal influence on a child's ability to face challenges. Parents should make every effort to determine howspare no effort to figure out how they can help their children to be independent. I hope that in the future the next generation will grow up as mature citizens.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is easy to follow and uses a useful range of language to examine how poverty, wealth, experience, and personality may affect problem-solving. Its main limitation is an unstable position: the conclusion's claim about equal influence does not clearly match the introduction, and some supporting ideas remain general. The highest-priority improvement is to maintain one precise stance and connect every example directly to that judgement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the issue from several relevant angles, but its final position shifts and some claims remain insufficiently supported.
State one consistent judgement about the role of family wealth and use each paragraph to prove that judgement directly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and overall progression are clear, although repeated framing and a loosely connected conclusion weaken the flow.
Use more varied logical transitions and ensure the conclusion synthesises the body arguments without introducing a changed emphasis.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the topic, but several collocations are imprecise or unnatural.
Choose more accurate expressions for low-income families and problem-solving, avoiding labels such as unfortunate children.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied sentence forms with generally clear meaning, though agreement, word order, and tense control are occasionally uneven.
Check subject-verb agreement and conditional time relationships, particularly when making general claims about children and upbringing.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Children who are brought up in the family that do not have a lot of money are better prepared to deal with problems when they become adults than children who are brought up by wealthy parent. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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