A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose?
Sample Response
Humans, throughout historyHuman, through the ages, has undergone many changes from the time when theyhe depicted a herd of mammoths on cave wallson the walls of the cave to the present day, whento nowadays when the arts are more sophisticatedcomplicated. Our attitude towards the environment hasis changed too. A few centuries ago people did not care about pollution, erosion, animal extinction, etc. However, nowadays people repeatedly discuss these issuespeople, again and again, talk about this and try to make a difference. I think that donations for environmental protectionmoney donation for environment protection must take priority over support for the artsthe support of the arts. BelowBellow, I will give my reasons to support my answer. The invention of the automobile is undoubtedly one of humankind'sone of the humankind's greatest inventions. However, the automobile brought us many disadvantages as well. The air todaynowadays is polluted by millions of cars every day. Every day clouds of exhaust riseclouds of exhaust are rising from the ground polluting the surrounding aircontaminating all around. So, I think that a company's donationmoney from a company can be used to make our air fresher and cleaner. Another important aspect of this is the contamination of water. Water is an essential resource for all living creatures. Nothing will survive without it. Unfortunately, we usespend fresh water sometimes very carelessly. Also, many factories discharge their wastewash away their used resources intoin the nearest river poisoning all living things thereeverything alive there. I think that monetary donations would be helpful for removing oil, garbage and chemical waste from our water resourcescleaning our water resources from oil, garbage and chemical matters. Finally, I think that humankind now facesnow humankind faced the problem of overpopulation. The population is dramatically rising. We need more food, shelters, clothes, construction materials and space. So, many animals are becoming extinctare extinguishing. So, I believe that this money could be spent on conducting a campaign against overpopulation. To sum up, I think that in order to make our children happy we should be more careful with the resources that we take from nature and if it is possible to restore them.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response’s clearest strength is its firm choice of environmental protection and its use of several relevant areas—air, water, and wildlife—to support that choice. However, development is uneven, the final overpopulation point is only loosely connected to a company donation, and frequent language errors reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to organize the reasons into distinct paragraphs and explain one realistic company-funded environmental action in depth.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear choice is maintained and supported by several relevant environmental concerns, though some reasoning remains general or indirect.
Explain how a specific company donation would produce a concrete environmental benefit, especially for the final point.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a recognizable sequence, but the single-paragraph presentation and repetitive linking make progression mechanical.
Separate the introduction, each main reason, and the conclusion into purposeful paragraphs with clearer internal topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range of environmental vocabulary, but frequent spelling and collocational inaccuracies reduce precision.
Replace inaccurate phrases such as "animals are extinguishing" and "chemical matters" with natural topic-specific wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex forms are attempted, but recurrent errors in agreement, tense, articles, and sentence construction are noticeable.
Prioritize accurate subject-verb agreement and verb forms, then proofread each complex sentence for a complete, controlled structure.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose?
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.