Dieting can change a person’s life for the better or ruins one’s health completely. What’s your opinion?
Sample Response
Dieting seems to be part of our liveslife in this modern society, especially for those who are health conscious. Different people choose different typestype of dieting methods, trying to achieve what they believe will benefit their health or physical appearancewhat they believe to be good for either their health or physical appearance. In general, most peoplemost of the people who diet focus on controllingare focusing on controlling their weight.
In our urban society, most of the working class person does not have the opportunity to consume a healthy meal. Their daily meals consist of fast food, which containsfast food which contains large amounts of fat and salt. The most significant proofprove of this unhealthy lifestyle is weight gainis the weight gain especially among those middle age working professionals. Therefore, most of these young and energetic people have to control their diet in order to stay in shape for either their appearance or their healtheither for their appearance or health. The most common and proper method of maintaining one’s weight is eating less oily food, preferably more green vegetables, fruits and avoid alcohol.
However, some have resorted to losing weight by taking their diet to the extreme, not eating at all for days. Others make themselves vomitwill make themselves vomit after each meal. Many others turn to diet medicationwill go for dieting medication and beverages that suppress their appetitehelp them to lose their appetite. These unhealthy dieting practicesThese unhealthy dieting will cause internal health problemsinternal damage in the long run.
In my opinion, dieting for better health is more important than solely to look attractivesolely for looking attractive. Individuals who wish to control their weight should seek professional adviceadvise if they are unable to reduce their weight after switching over to a healthy diet for a period of time. Losing weight and damaging their healthlosing your health at the same time does not benefit any individual.
This essay needs some work. The first body paragraph explains the reason people have for dieting, whereas it should explain what are the advantages or the dangers of it. The second body paragraph explains how to diet, whereas it should present arguments for or against dieting. Therefore, the task is only partially covered here.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response communicates a sensible preference for health-focused dieting and includes relevant warnings about extreme methods, with generally clear paragraph-level progression. Its main limitation is uneven task coverage, compounded by an inappropriate final paragraph that comments on the essay instead of continuing the argument; prioritise a direct evaluation of how dieting helps or harms health, supported by fully developed reasons and examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A relevant opinion is given, but substantial space explains reasons and methods rather than evaluating dieting's benefits and dangers.
Organise the argument around clearly developed positive and negative health effects, then directly weigh them in the conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The main essay paragraphs follow a broadly understandable sequence, but progression is uneven and the final meta-commentary breaks coherence.
Remove commentary about the essay itself and use each body paragraph to develop one clearly signposted argumentative point.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for the topic and includes some effective health-related terms, despite several inaccurate word choices and collocations.
Correct forms and combinations such as “proof,” “professional advice,” and “middle-aged professionals” to improve precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex sentences communicates the main ideas, but agreement, article, number, and verb-form errors recur.
Prioritise subject-verb agreement and consistent singular-plural forms when proofreading each sentence.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Dieting can change a person’s life for the better or ruins one’s health completely. What’s your opinion?
Your response
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