With an increasing population communicating via the Internet and text messaging, face-to-face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
theThe use of the Internet and smartphones has become a global phenomenon, and we depend on these technological marvels in one way or another. While some people assert that the widespread use of Internet communication and mobile phones will replace the traditional form of face-to-face interaction, I completely disagree with this view.
To begin with, the use of the internet and other modernlatest communication technologies drivesdrive us to meet new people and contact loved ones who live far awaydear ones who stay far away. This is especially trueThis can especially be true when one gets a chance to express his or her feelings by textvia a text or phone call. To quote an example, Skype and Facebook have enabled people living in far-flung areas to communicate effectively through video chats, thereby allowing us to contact people more frequentlyenabling us to contact more frequently with people we care about. This has not replaced the way we care for and meet others; rather,others, rather it has made such contact more convenient and frequentmade it more convenient and frequent.
While the advancement of technology might scale back personal contact to some extent infor the short term, it, in fact, enables people to become more inclined to seepolarised towards seeing siblings, parents and mates in the long run. This can be easily visualised by taking into account that if we are to sustain the Internet as a tool to deliver our emotions and beliefs to the world, we will need to picture-proof gatherings, celebrations and events thereby obviating the need for face-to-face communication.
Secondly, human beings are socialthe human is a social beings, and it is through physical presenceto the credit of this physical presence that we as a species are able to buildharness long-term relationships, so the value of face-to-face contactits value cannot be undermined. Mere endorsing words of good character by texts cannot inculcate the right kind of virtue, thereby further laying emphasis on human presence for the future is required.
To conclude, it is clearly evident that the internet and text messaging will not make face-to-face communication a footnote of the past, but rather make us want to make more relationships and get in touch with them as well as our family and relatives.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear disagreement and offers relevant ideas about technology supporting distant relationships and the enduring value of physical presence. However, several explanations become unclear or internally inconsistent, especially the claim involving ‘picture-proof’ gatherings and removing the need for face-to-face contact, while frequent collocation and grammar errors reduce precision. Prioritise one logically consistent reason per paragraph and express it in simpler, controlled language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and relevant reasons are presented, but some support is insufficiently explained or contradicts the stated disagreement.
Replace the unclear gathering argument with a direct explanation of why online contact encourages rather than replaces later in-person meetings.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing provides a visible progression, though internal links and referents sometimes obscure the relationship between claims and conclusions.
Build each body paragraph around one topic sentence followed by one explanation and one clearly connected example.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a broad vocabulary range, but frequent miscollocations and inaccurate choices such as ‘polarised towards seeing’ and ‘picture-proof’ impair clarity.
Choose familiar, precise phrases such as ‘more inclined to meet’ and avoid uncommon words unless their meaning and collocation are certain.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex structures are attempted, but agreement, clause joining, and sentence-construction errors are frequent and sometimes impede meaning.
Prioritise accurate subject-verb agreement and complete clause structures before adding complex participle phrases or multiple subordinate ideas.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
With an increasing population communicating via the Internet and text messaging, face-to-face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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