Homeschooling is better than school. Do you agree or disagree?

Sample Response

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In general, most of the children study in public or private school, which is the formal way we gain knowledge from. However, otherssome other people assert that homeschooling has more benefits. Although there are discussions on both sides, I strongly disagree that homeschooling is better. To begin with, the reasons why people prefer homeschooling consider several benefits. First, the schedulethe time schedule is more flexible than a school timetablemore flexible than school. Parents can arrange lesson timesthe time of learning courses freely without athe fixed routine. Second, it depends on the children’s interests of what they are passionate to study so they can be more concentrated in the subjects. Third, children do not need to worry about the stress of competition with other students. They can study at their own pacefollow and adjust their personal progress to study, thus it is more effective for learning. AlthoughDespite I agree with some points above, the drawbacks of home learning far outweigh its advantages. Firstly, children are not likely to learn general knowledgethe general knowledge at home if they only focus on certain subjects. Their understanding and knowledge ofon various fields will be limited. Second, the lack of competition between their peersthe peer students will weaken the children’s competitivenessability of competitiveness. The less stress of competing with others, the less motivation of improvement and pursuit of better result. As a consequence, the ability to handle pressurecapacity of pressure handling is considerably loweris lower considerably, especially when adapting toespecially adapting in the working environment in the future. Lastly, children barely have a chancebarely have chance to develop social skillsthe social skills undoubtedly due to less interactiondue to the less interaction with the fellow children. They will become more introvertedverted. The potential ability of leadership, communication and problem solving skills are diminished. To conclude, I am not in favor of homeschooling. It limits the children’s overall personal development and slows their learning progresswhole personal development and a slower learning progress. Studying in formal school is more beneficial in terms of the physical and mental purposes.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response’s strongest feature is its clear disagreement with the proposition and its sustained attempt to justify that view through educational, competitive, and social considerations. Its main limitation is frequent awkward phrasing and grammatical inaccuracy, compounded by presenting the entire argument as one paragraph; the highest-priority improvement is to organise the ideas into focused paragraphs and express each causal claim in precise, natural sentences.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

6.5
Scoring rule

A clear position is maintained, and several relevant advantages and disadvantages are discussed, though some claims remain generalized or only partly explained.

Next step

Develop fewer central reasons more fully by explaining their consequences and supporting them with specific, plausible examples.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

5.5
Scoring rule

The argument follows a recognizable sequence, but mechanical listing and the absence of paragraph breaks weaken the clarity of progression.

Next step

Separate the introduction, opposing view, main argument, and conclusion into purposeful paragraphs with clearer links between related ideas.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

The vocabulary is adequate for the topic and includes some less common terms, but recurrent collocation and word-form problems make expression awkward.

Next step

Build control of natural academic collocations, especially for competition, motivation, social interaction, and personal development.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5
Scoring rule

The response attempts varied sentence forms, but frequent errors with clauses, articles, prepositions, agreement, and comparison reduce accuracy.

Next step

Prioritize accurate complex-sentence patterns and proofread each sentence for a complete clause structure, correct agreement, and necessary articles.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

Homeschooling is better than school. Do you agree or disagree?

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