Exposure to international media such as films, TV and magazines has a significant impact on local cultures. What do you think has been the impact? Do you think its advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Sample Response
It is well known that media globalisation through movies, TV and magazines hasmedia globalisation such as movies, TV and magazines have great effects on localinternal cultures. It highly influences the the formation of culturescultures formation and a massive change is observed through nation’s behaviours. Although globalisation through media has many advantages that bring people around the world togetherput people around the world altogether, we cannot avoid some disadvantages being conveyedto being conveyed. Media is a good carrier of knowledge and information. It saves time for the learner to acquire new science or even help him to create ideas. It also helps with countries' developmentAlso help in countries development, whenever a country mimics successful plans of other countries, like the United European organisation where the countries involved in this organisation exchange news of flourishment and high achievements. We can also see that people living in different countries watch the same programs and read the same magazineswatch same programs and read same magazines are able to get closer, however far apart they arehowever, far they are. They can also exchange languages and habits of different cultures, and easily understand each other. And though, somebody can go anywhere and communicate with people from other culturesmeet with his best friend or even with his soul-mate where common thoughts meet. On the other hand, media has some disadvantages that we cannot avoid, and I believe that children are getting the greatest harmthe greatest percent of loss there are some impolite scenes transferred to their pure minds, which can encourage harmful thoughtsfrom where catalyses bad thoughts. In addition, nowadays, there are research studies that justify the opinion of most watched TV increases the percentage of stupidity and foolishness. It also does not give the children or teenagers to practice beneficial activities and be more productive to their society. One more bad consequence of media prevalenceprevail is that it weakens the relations between the individual and family or friends. One is less able to communicate with people around him and share wonderful moments. There will be no good memories to accompany him in elderly and hard times. To sum up, we can conclude that media shows obvious change on a variety of cultures and generates new disciplinary of living ways. However, we should not go in deep with it and we should entertain it within the limit to avoid its drawbacks.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response is strongest in covering both beneficial and harmful effects of international media and offering a broadly understandable discussion of cultural change. Its main limitation is an unclear judgement about whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, compounded by weak paragraphing and frequent language errors. The highest-priority improvement is to state a definite comparative position and organise separate benefit and drawback paragraphs around precise, concrete cultural examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the impact of international media and discusses both advantages and disadvantages. The position is understandable but not consistently clear on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and some examples are vague or only loosely connected to local culture.
State clearly whether advantages outweigh disadvantages, then organize the body around two cultural benefits and two cultural risks with concrete examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a broad progression from benefits to drawbacks and a conclusion. However, paragraphing is absent, some ideas are loosely sequenced, and several sentences start with weak additive links that do not show relationships between ideas.
Use separate paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages, and make each paragraph begin with a clear topic sentence about cultural impact.
Lexical Resource
The essay uses some topic vocabulary such as media globalisation, cultures, languages, habits, and communication. Lexical control is uneven, with inaccurate collocations and vague phrases such as internal cultures, most watched TV, and media prevail.
Build a set of precise culture-and-media phrases, such as "local traditions", "cultural exchange", "media influence", "screen time", and "family relationships".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries, and clause structure affect fluency and sometimes clarity. The meaning is usually recoverable, but grammatical control is the weakest criterion.
Write shorter sentences with one main clause, then check subject-verb agreement and articles before adding extra clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Exposure to international media such as films, TV and magazines has a significant impact on local cultures. What do you think has been the impact? Do you think its advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
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