Many people are optimistic about the 21st century and see it as an opportunity to make a positive change in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with their optimism? What changes would you like to be made in the century?
Sample Response
It is widely believedcommonly deemed that the 21st century has a promisingglorious outlook and this new era is widelyjointly believed to be the ideal opportunity to improveoptimal opportunity of bettering the world. Frankly, I choose to side with the majority on the grounds of facts presented in the paragraphs below.
Needless to say, the 21st century is marked by amazing progress in science and technology, as well as intense competition. Undoubtedly, the advances in these fieldsadvancement in this realm will make various contributions to human society. To illustrate, the basic infrastructure will be modified, which can better serve the purpose of providing convenience and easiness in daily life. In addition, the development of cutting-edge technologies, which plays a pivotal role in the continuing growth of globalisation, willcoming and growing and growing phenomenon of globalization will, of course, bringbeing advantages worldwide in education, business, economic optimisationeconomy optimization, and global cooperationthe global synergy. ThisSuch, in turn, will produce outcomescarry out outcomes of great efficiency and effectiveness in every area of societyevery field of the community.
From another perspective, the 21st century, as a more civilized century, tends to give rise to a revolution of thinking. Compared with the industrial eratimes, the 21st century can be called the information eracalled information era. OverallOn average, people around the world are more educated and thus haveand thus, have more awareness of the importance of striking a balance in the ecosystemstriking balance in eco-system. The increasing number of advocates who care about environmental issues like animal protection and environmental pollutionnatural contamination is the best evidence of people’s recognition of sustainableconsistent development.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a clear optimistic stance and organizes two relevant areas of possible progress, which gives the discussion a recognizable direction. Its main limitation is the complete omission of the requested changes the writer would like to see, compounded by slight underlength and the absence of a conclusion. The highest priority is to answer that second question with specific proposals, explain their benefits, and close by restating the full position.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The writer states agreement and offers relevant reasons for optimism, but does not answer the question about desired changes.
Add a developed section proposing specific changes for the century and conclude with a position covering both questions.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and broad progression are clear, although development is uneven and the response ends without a conclusion.
Use each body paragraph for one explicit task component and add a concise concluding paragraph to complete the progression.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a broad academic vocabulary, but frequent awkward collocations and word choices reduce precision.
Prioritize accurate common combinations, replacing phrases such as being advantages and carry out outcomes with natural alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex forms is attempted, but recurring agreement, article, punctuation, and verb-form errors weaken control.
Check the structure of every long sentence, especially subject-verb agreement and modal constructions such as will bring advantages.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people are optimistic about the 21st century and see it as an opportunity to make a positive change in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with their optimism? What changes would you like to be made in the century?
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