Even though globalization affects the world’s economy in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss.
Sample Response
Globalization is a process of advancement and increase in interaction between the world's countriesworlds’ countries and people. It involvesinvoles in transportationlocomotion, communication, knowledge and skills. GlobalizationGlobalazation is gaining speedspeen over the entire world. It has attractedattract enough world attention needed from international organizationsorganization in promoting and encouraging human rightsright and freedom, opportunities, economic, social and culturalculture rights.
However, there are some countries that are missing out on the opportunitiesmissing out the opportunities that are offered and this is seen asand its taken as a big problem to their country. They are the poorer countries that are not connected to the people globally and their people are unskilled due to the lack of knowledge and equipmentequipments. They are also unable to trade with the other countries which are richer and larger as they are unable to meet the demands placed on themmeet the demand propose of them. They also will not have the opportunities and the challenges that are requiredrequire. Globalization has also encouragedencourage crimes like the illegal drug trafficking around the world through the air, sea and land. This has involved human smuggling and stuffing it in anything they come across. This has caused many problems foraffected a lot of problems to the country and the families of the drug addicts. This will also lead to other crimes like robbery and violence in the country.
Another negative side of globalization is the dumping of the dangerous waste into rivers, seas, or oceansto the river, sea or the ocean. This will affect aquatic creatureseffect the aquactic creature, contaminatecontaninate the water and cause harm to the people too.
To conclude, globalization has contributed a lot to the world economyworld’s econnmics but the international organization should also not forget the poorer countries and the countries should also tackle its other negative sides that affect the world.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response has a recognizable structure and identifies several relevant disadvantages of globalization, including unequal access, crime, and environmental damage. The discussion is nevertheless unbalanced because the claimed economic benefits receive almost no explanation, while several negative links are asserted rather than developed. The priority is to explain both sides with specific cause-and-effect support, then improve sentence accuracy and topic vocabulary so the argument is easier to follow.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response discusses several negative effects, but the positive economic side is only briefly asserted and many ideas lack sufficient explanation.
Develop at least one clear economic benefit and explain how each disadvantage results from globalization before drawing the conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and basic sequencing provide an overall direction, but the long central paragraph contains loosely connected claims and unclear references.
Give each major effect its own paragraph and use explicit topic sentences and cause-and-effect links to guide the reader.
Lexical Resource
There is enough topic vocabulary to discuss trade, crime, and pollution, but frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word combinations limit clarity.
Check high-frequency topic words and learn accurate combinations such as economic growth, meet demand, hazardous waste, and water contamination.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex sentences, but frequent errors with verb forms, agreement, articles, plurals, and pronouns reduce control.
Review each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb, then check agreement and article use systematically.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Even though globalization affects the world’s economy in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss.
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