These days, many people use the Internet to search for solutions to their medical problems. Why is it so? Is it a positive or a negative development?
Sample Response
A large number of individuals nowadays usesurf the Internet to find information about remedies for their health issuesfind remedies for their health issues. Convenience, accessibility, and privacy are the main reasons for this, and I believe this is a negative development because it can create anxiety and lead to misdiagnosis.
Convenience and accessibilityThe convenience and accessibility have caused many people to go onlinego on the internet to find information about their health conditions. The Internet offers easy access to a wealth of health-related information from the comfort of one’s home. With just a few clicks, for example, individuals gainget access to a plethora of medical resources, including medical journals, blogs and websitesmedical journals, medical blogs and medical websites. Another compelling reason for this trend is privacy and anonymity. Many people prefer searching for information online to maintaindue to maintaining privacy and anonymity. They feel more comfortable researching sensitive health conditions on the Internet without fearwithout the fear of stigma or judgment. This is particularly true for a person dealing with mental health concerns that is considered a social taboo.
However, excessive searching forthe excessive searching of health-related topics online may prove to be dangerous for individuals. The Internet is contains a wide rangefilled with an extensive range of health-related information, although not all of it is reliable or accurate. Many individuals neither verify the source for accuracy nor conduct any checksneither verify the source to ensure accuracy nor do they conduct any checks to ensure that the information they findfound is reliable. Consequently, exposure to misinformation may cause severe anxiety or panicacute anxiety and panic, and this can change the individuals’ behaviourbehavioural patterns of individuals. Cyberchondria is a case in point. It is a disorder in which people fear that they are severely ill, which is caused by reading about illness online. Moreover, not all information found on the Internetinternet is reliable or accuratereliable and authentic. Therefore relying on the information found on the Internet for self-diagnosis can be dangerous and potentially fataldangerous and fatal.
In conclusion, although the Internet has revolutionized access to health-related information, providing convenience and privacy, I believe this is a negative development because health-related online searches can lead to sheer panic, causing behavioural changes and misdiagnosis.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear position and develops relevant reasons and consequences with strong control of structure and vocabulary. Its main limitation is repetition, especially around the unreliability of online information, alongside a few awkward grammatical and collocational choices. The highest-priority improvement is to make each supporting point distinct and precise, particularly by explaining the pathway from unreliable advice to misdiagnosis rather than restating the same danger.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response answers both questions clearly and develops relevant reasons and negative consequences with suitable explanation and an example.
Develop misdiagnosis as a distinct consequence instead of repeating the broader point that online information may be unreliable.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through a clear introduction, focused body paragraphs, and a consistent conclusion, although some content is repeated.
Reduce repeated claims about unreliable information and use each sentence to advance the argument with a new link or consequence.
Lexical Resource
A sufficiently wide vocabulary supports precise discussion of healthcare information, privacy, anxiety, and self-diagnosis, despite several awkward collocations.
Replace unnatural combinations such as “due to maintaining privacy” with more idiomatic phrasing and avoid overstated wording such as “dangerous and fatal.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied range of complex structures is used with generally good control, and the occasional agreement or clause error does not impede meaning.
Check agreement and relative-clause reference carefully, especially in sentences where singular people, conditions, and social attitudes are combined.
Write this task while it is fresh
Try the same task now. It helps you remember the feedback and write better next time.
IELTS Writing Task 2
These days, many people use the Internet to search for solutions to their medical problems. Why is it so? Is it a positive or a negative development?
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.