Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
Sample Response
Ill-disciplined and ill-tempered school students and well-mannered students coexist in almost every school, college and universityevery schools, colleagues and universities. From my perspective, it could be more efficient for well-mannered pupils to study discretely, however, it can affect fatally to other ones. It is evident that naughty students have a bad effect on other students. For instance, they encourageinfluence well-mannered students to smoke or drink alcohol. For this reason, the classes of these students must be separate. They do not just treat these kinds of things also they make a lot of noise in the class and this lead to students to do not concentrate properly. Therefore,Therefore every school administratorevery school's superintendent must establish a disciplinary systemmake a discipline system and be strict withon them. The classrooms becomeget unsuitable because of such disruptive students who hamper a sound teaching environment. These troublesome students would often prevent the teacher from teachingdeter the teacher to teach in harmony. Their activities often include exercising powerpower exercising, getting involved in politics and other harmful activities that might affect the overall learning environment in the classroomstudy environment of the classes and this is a serious issue in many schools nowadays. On the other hand, there are some drawbacks, too. The main disadvantage of this policy is that bad-mannered students will not be able to interact with themcontact them and follow their exampletake examples from their attitudes. Namely, the most efficient way is to take good behaviours from well-mannered students and with this policy, it will not be available. And these classes will be unpopular with teachersthis class will be unwanted by teachers. ConsequentlyThereby it will be boring for teachers to teach their lessons and these lessons will be ineffectivethis lesson will be inefficient for these students. If all the unmanageable and rough students are separated, theirseparated their level of wrongdoing will increase significantly. To sum up, while discrete classes might be very efficient and have a lot of advantages, it has drawbacks for naughty and bad-mannered students.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response identifies relevant reasons for separating disruptive students and recognizes possible harm to those placed in separate classes. However, the writer's own agreement or disagreement remains unclear, development is often confusing, and frequent language errors weaken communication. The highest priority is to state one consistent position, organize support into clear paragraphs, and explain each reason through accurately formed sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The issue is addressed from both sides, but the position is ambiguous and several ideas are insufficiently or confusingly developed.
State a direct degree of agreement in the introduction and conclusion, then select two clearly explained reasons that support it.
Coherence and Cohesion
Basic progression is visible through contrasting points, but the response lacks effective paragraphing and contains unclear referencing and connections.
Separate the case for and against the policy into distinct paragraphs with one controlling idea in each.
Lexical Resource
There is some range for discussing discipline and education, but frequent inaccurate word choices and collocations make ideas awkward or unclear.
Prioritize accurate common expressions for classroom behaviour and educational consequences instead of attempting imprecise formal wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts complex sentences, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb patterns, and sentence construction sometimes impede meaning.
Build shorter complete sentences and check subject-verb agreement and infinitive patterns before combining ideas into complex structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
Your response
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