Some people think that technology has made our life too complex. However, other people think that it has made our life easier. What is your viewpoint?
Sample Response
Admittedly, modern technology has caused so many changes in our lives. Because of its impact on our livesWith its impact in our lives in recent yearsfor the recent years, some believe that it has given us a complicated life and others refute this because they believe that it has made life easier for us. These points of viewThese points view will be discussed in this order. It is believed by some that new technology has made our lives too complicated because of the modern crimes we have heard these days. For instance, more electronic offences have beenbeing committed such as stalking and fraud offences. My elder brother, Fernando Meriales, who is a very busy engineer in Australia, is using an online bank because he thinks managingdealing his accounts online is much easierway much easier than doing it in the traditional way at the bankdoing it traditionally to the bank. However, online money transactions have been committed by fraudstersthe fraud offenders using his bank account without his knowledge. In addition to this, social media crimes through the use of social networking sites such as Facebook and Instagram also emerged. An example is the San Roque High school girl student; Jessel Mallari has been fooled by her 30-yearyears-old lover onin Facebook and was raped by this criminal and taken her life. Thus, it is clear why some people gravitate towards this point of view. On the other hand, many argue that modern technology has made our lives easier for the high-tech equipment and transportation facilities members of the publicpublic people are using nowadays. For example, in the hospital where I am working, the Urdaneta Sacred Heart Hospital is using the Respiratory Ventilator for breathing support of our critically ill patients. Also, we do have a CT (Computed Topography) scan to diagnose easily patients with brain diseasesthose who have brain diseases. These two new technologies improve and prolong our patients' lives. Another example is the computerised transport systemscomputer transportation system such as skyway and subway rail stations such in Singapore where through computers they can see who are the transport violators and ensure public safetyensures the public safety. These examples suggest thatAfter analysing these facts, it is clear why many people support this claim. In conclusion, for reasons related to e-crimes and social crimes as well as high-tech facilities in medical and transportation field, the issue of whether technology has made our lives too complex or easier is refuted and supported by many. However, after analysing these two points of view, it is clear that the argument that technology has given us a more convenient life can be supported and is expected to be realised.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response clearly considers both perspectives and reaches a definite preference, with a broad range of relevant technology examples. However, the argument is weakened by anecdotal or over-detailed support, mechanical linking, and frequent grammar and collocation errors that reduce precision. The highest priority is to state the position earlier, develop each side around one directly relevant example, and edit sentences for simpler, more accurate language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay addresses both views and gives a final preference for technology making life easier. However, examples are often anecdotal, over-detailed, or only loosely connected to the main argument.
State your own position earlier and develop each side with one clear reason plus a directly relevant example.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a recognizable introduction, two body sections, and conclusion, with some progression. Cohesion is mechanical and several long sentences reduce clarity.
Use shorter topic sentences and link each example back to the viewpoint it supports.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary covers the topic, including crime, banking, medical, and transport terms, but word choice and collocation errors are frequent.
Replace unnatural phrases with simpler accurate collocations such as online banking, public transport systems, and medical technology.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but tense, article, preposition, and agreement errors occur regularly. Meaning is usually clear.
Edit for verb forms, articles, and prepositions before adding more complex clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that technology has made our life too complex. However, other people think that it has made our life easier. What is your viewpoint?
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