The presence of technology in the classroom has become more and more apparent and offers students tremendous resources with which to supplement their education. Given time, technology will completely replace the traditional teacher in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?
Sample Response
In this digital era, technologyIn this digital era technology is playing an important role in all major sectors and 'education and teachingeducation & teaching' is no exception. It has definitely changed the way we learn and teach. However, there are several reasons that make me believe that technology will never be able to replace our conventional teachers completely. Firstly, technology cannot make decisions the way humans do. For instance, in a class, if a student does not understand a topic, a teacher can decide to explain it in a different way or even with a familiar example. Technology cannot relate to our day to day lives. Also, a machine or softwarea software cannot differentiate between good and bad behaviourbetween good and behaviour and subsequently, cannot respond with punishment or rewardhandle it with a punishment or a reward. Technology will never be able to handle a class full of kids the way teachers do while being loved, respected and inspiring students at the same time. Every student is different and may need different treatmentEvery student is different and may need a different treatment which teachers are best able to providewhich teachers do the best. I believe that technology can help the teachers to teach more efficiently but can never play their role. Secondly, the computer systemlogical matrix lacks an emotional understandingrepertoire. Teachers play a very important role in motivating and guiding students, not only in their academic worknot only in their academics but also in their personal lives. Technology cannot do that. Unlike machines, teachers can gauge when to be funny, serious or sympathetic. Moreover, though we need to use technology on a daily basis today, not everyone is tech-savvy. I myself still prefer blackboards over slideshows for learning. A complete technology-driven classroomtechnology driven classroom seems very mechanical to me. All these points strengthenfortify my opinion that technology cannot replace teachers. Nonetheless, the way it assists teachers will arguably change over time with new innovations; hopefully only to better our learning experience!
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear, well-supported disagreement, using relevant points about human judgement, classroom management, motivation, and emotional support to sustain its position. Its main weakness is presentation: the entire argument appears as one long paragraph, while a few expressions are awkward. Prioritise dividing the essay into a clear introduction, focused body paragraphs, and conclusion, then add one concrete example of technology assisting teachers.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives a clear disagreement and develops relevant reasons about human judgement, classroom management, motivation, and emotional support.
Add a slightly clearer introduction-conclusion structure and one concrete example of technology supporting, rather than replacing, teachers.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically, though the essay is written as one long paragraph. Cohesion is generally clear but would benefit from clearer paragraph breaks.
Divide the essay into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a short conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and mostly precise, with some effective phrases. A few word choices are unnatural or inaccurate.
Check collocations carefully when using abstract language such as emotional repertoire or technology-driven classroom.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is generally controlled, with a good range of clauses. There are occasional article, word form, and punctuation errors.
Proofread for missing commas after introductory phrases and small word-form slips.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The presence of technology in the classroom has become more and more apparent and offers students tremendous resources with which to supplement their education. Given time, technology will completely replace the traditional teacher in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?
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