Many people believe that television programs are of no value for children. Do you agree? Why or why not?
Sample Response
TelevisionTelevisual media has become a pervasive force in the lives of families around the world today. Yet, a central question remains: whetherremains regarding whether watching television is harmful or beneficial for children. An analysis of this question reveals that television programs present three major concerns for childrenin the case of children, including depictions of violence, the use of profane language, and the portrayalrepresentation of poor moral role models. Television programs that portray violence are a majorparamount concern for parents nowadays. Recent research has shown that children may commit acts of violence because they wish to emulate the behavior that they see on television. This is especially true when violent acts are committed by well-known action “heroes.” In addition, television programs show cartoon figures, as well as actors, committing violent acts. Using comic situations to depict violent themes causes further problems with the way in which young people view violence. Television programs that contain profane or disrespectful language also worry parents with young children. Because censorship laws have relaxed over the past few decades, it has become very common for television programs of many kindsprograms of each and every kind to show characters using impolite, rude, and insulting languageexpressing impolite, rude, and insulting utterances to one another. As with portrayals of violenceBearing resemblance to the case of portrayals of violence, children unfortunately often try to imitate this behaviour they see on televisionthese actions they watch on their television screens. Finally, some parents are upset about the moral behavior depicted on television. As they struggle to teach their children moral and ethical values, parents might despair about the lack of morals and ethics represented in some of the so-called role models on television. For instance, certain characters not only have no remorse for their immoral actions, but also frequently go unpunished by society at largego unpunished by larger society. Because of these factors, many parents believe that television programs send their youth the wrong kinds of messages. The emulation of this poor behavior by their children is something they wish to avoid at all costs, and they have accordingly decided to ban television in their households for these reasons.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response develops a persuasive case through three relevant concerns, with precise vocabulary and consistently controlled complex sentences. Its main limitation is that the writer's own agreement is conveyed only indirectly through discussion of parents' views, while the single-block presentation weakens the visible organisation. State the personal position explicitly and divide the argument into purposeful paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the question through three relevant, well-explained harms, although the writer's personal degree of agreement remains implicit.
State the position directly in the introduction and conclusion, then connect each concern explicitly to the claim that programmes have no value for children.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically from violence to language and moral influence, with clear linking and referencing throughout.
Separate the introduction, each main concern, and the conclusion into distinct paragraphs to make the argument's structure immediately visible.
Lexical Resource
A wide and precise vocabulary supports nuanced discussion, with only occasional wording that sounds somewhat formal or awkward.
Prefer natural combinations such as portrayals of violence and society as a whole over unnecessarily elaborate phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A broad range of complex sentence forms is used accurately, and errors are rare and do not disrupt meaning.
Refine occasional compressed constructions and participial openings so that every relationship between ideas is expressed as naturally as possible.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people believe that television programs are of no value for children. Do you agree? Why or why not?
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