Some people say that people remember special gifts or presents that they receive. Why do you think that is?

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Sample Response

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In our liveslife, we get a lot of presents onin different occasions. Some of these are special to us and we consider themconsider those as treasured mementosdistinctive souvenirs. I still remember the gift I got from my uncle on my 5th birthday. It was a big doll with blond hairwith a blond hair and I loved it so much and it was my favourite toy in my childhood. I believeI believe, people remember special gifts due to a variety of reasons and in the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on thiselaborate this. Presents are substantial in our life, they are meant to show love and care. It does not matter if the gift is expensive or not, it is enough to get a present onin a special day in our life. Some gifts are given as incentives for doing something good or exemplary. People remember those gifts for a long time. For example, when I was a little child at schoola little child at a school, teachers encouraged us to study well by giving us banknotes as rewardsbanknotes as a souvenir. Actually, I still keep these banknotes and still remember our teachers. I will always remember how these presents gave me a positive spirit to study well. There are many gifts we cannot forget because they are given by people we love and care aboutpeople we love and care. For me, the first gift I gave to my mother on Mother's Dayin the Mother's day, was a simple one but I cannot forget how she gave me a warm hug and cried within joy. She still keeps this present and always says ''it is the most precious present I have ever hadI ever had!'' It is important to show our feelings to those who are special in our life by sharing happiness and joysharing the happiness and joy and giving them gifts. Gifts are important because they are the token of our appreciation, metaphor of love and care and some such giftssome of such gifts become special to us because they are given on special occasionsoccasion by someone special. Naturally, we remember such presents for a long time.presents for a long.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

Personal examples and a consistent focus on emotional or motivational associations make the central explanation easy to understand. However, frequent errors with articles, prepositions, collocations, and sentence boundaries reduce fluency, while the unbroken paragraph weakens organisation and one example shifts toward giving rather than receiving a gift. The highest-priority improvement is to revise sentences systematically for grammatical accuracy and natural word choice.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

7.0
Scoring rule

The response explains several relevant reasons why gifts remain memorable and supports them with personal examples, though one example focuses more on giving than receiving.

Next step

Keep every example centred on the recipient’s memory and explain more explicitly how each gift’s meaning makes it unforgettable.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

The reasoning follows a generally clear sequence, but presenting the entire response as one paragraph obscures the separation and progression of its main ideas.

Next step

Divide the essay into an introduction, distinct body paragraphs for each reason, and a conclusion, using transitions only where they clarify the logic.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

The response shows a sufficient range of vocabulary and attempts less common expressions, but several choices and collocations are awkward or inaccurate.

Next step

Replace unnatural combinations such as “in different occasions” and “for a long” with precise, idiomatic phrasing and check article use around noun phrases.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0
Scoring rule

A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates the meaning clearly, although recurring article, preposition, agreement, punctuation, and sentence-boundary errors limit control.

Next step

Proofread each sentence for articles and prepositions, then separate comma-spliced independent clauses with appropriate punctuation or conjunctions.

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