Women can do everything that men can and they even do it better. They also can do many things that men cannot. But it is a fact that their work is not appreciated as much as men’s, although they have to sacrifice a lot for their family and career. It is said: “A woman’s place is in the home.” What do you think?
Sample Response
Women and men have had different roles in the community since the beginning. In modern timesUnder modern pretexts these differences are gradually diminishingthese differences are slowly converging. However, due to genetic inheritancedue to the genetic inheritance and sociodemographic factorssocio-demographic components, these differences do exist.
Firstly, men are undoubtedly genetically better adaptedbetter adapted genetically to perform physical tasks. Therefore, the assumption that women can match men in everything is clearly flawed. The difference between their physical abilities is clearly demonstrated in the sporting arena. Take, for example, the Olympics or any international sporting event. It can be clearly seen that in these competitions the genders are separated due to inherent differences between the sexes.
Secondly, it has been argued that women are less appreciated in society due to their traditional roles in the home. This statement is true to a certain extent because it largely depends on the society in questionit largely depends on the society. In certain traditional societies in Africa, women's employment is frowned uponfemales working is frowned upon and is seen as neglecting the family, whereas in Afghanistan, in general, females are allowed to do little else but stay at home as housewivesstay at home, being a housewife.
Consequently, a woman’s value is largely dictated by society, culture, and historythe society, culture and history. Nevertheless, to state that her place is in the home is widely considered sexist in modern Westernwestern societies.
To conclude, differences do certainly exist; however, these are largely due to natural differenceslargely through nature. Also, the rolesrole women may have is usually dictated by other factors, such as, religion or society, not ability.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is logically organised and uses varied language to explore biological and social influences on gender roles, reaching a nuanced conclusion about the claim that women belong at home. Its main limitation is that the position is only fully explicit late in the essay, while the response is also slightly under length and some ideas remain compressed. Prioritise a direct thesis and fuller development of the central claim.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the central issue and offers a relevant, nuanced position, but some discussion is indirect or insufficiently developed and the essay is under length.
State the opinion on women's place in the home clearly in the introduction and develop it with one fuller supporting example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses logically through clearly separated stages, with effective paragraphing and generally natural linking.
Make the relationship between the discussion of physical differences and the central home-role claim more explicit.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, although a few choices such as modern pretexts and females working are awkward.
Use more natural academic collocations when describing social change and women's employment.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a good range of complex sentences with generally strong control despite a few agreement and phrasing errors.
Check agreement and clause construction in phrases such as females working is to improve accuracy.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Women can do everything that men can and they even do it better. They also can do many things that men cannot. But it is a fact that their work is not appreciated as much as men’s, although they have to sacrifice a lot for their family and career. It is said: “A woman’s place is in the home.” What do you think?
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