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Cambridge IELTS 21 · General Training Test 2
General Training G类 · Task 1
官方评分7.5分
完整作文题目
You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.
Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter
• say why you enjoy walking and where
• describe the litter you have seen on your walks
• suggest what might be done about the problem
Dear Sir or Madam,
完整考生作文
Dear Sir or Madam
I have been enjoying long walks in the near countryside for years. Admiring the thriving nature is a great pleasure. I love observing wild animals roaming around and take pictures of them. It is my passion and it gives me much happiness. The countryside is a place where I can forget about the problems of my everyday life. I am sure that it brings everyone joy.
However recently I have started noticing large piles of rubbish being left around the place. I have found enormous amounts of plastic bags, bottles, containers and even tires. Not only does it destroy the beauty of the countryside’s landscape, but it also destroys the delicate environment of the place. The litter can be dangerous to animals. I have found things such as gasoline containers.
The problem has to be dealt with immidiately. I would support having people pay fines for leving the rubbish in such places. The town council could also set up cameras, to catch such people. Another way of dealing with the problem could also be sending police patrols to control the situation.
I hope my proposition will be considered
Sincerely,
XYZ
官方考官完整点评
The writer has covered the three bullet points in detail: the passion for walking, the types of litter [plastic bags, bottles, containers | tires | gasoline containers], and the suggestions for solutions [pay fines | cameras | police patrols].
The response is easy to read, with good cohesion. The writer has used a range of cohesive devices [however | Not only | but | also] and used referencing [them | such people] to achieve this.
There is flexibility in the use of vocabulary, with some good collocation and higher-level items [thriving nature | delicate environment | dealt with | control the situation], and only a few errors [immidiately / immediately | leving / leaving]. Similarly, there are a variety of grammatical structures, including modal forms and some multi-clause sentences. However, many of the sentences are fairly short, single clause sentences and, in the second paragraph, there is repeated use of the present perfect.
This is already a strong response to the task. To achieve the highest ratings, there could be greater accuracy in use of vocabulary, and wider use of multi-clause sentences.

