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任务类型
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官方分数或范文
全部647.5分57.0分106.5分96.0分135.5分85.0分5考官范文14
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Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 3

Academic A类 · Task 1

官方评分5.0分
字数
144
题型
A类小作文

完整作文题目

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
雅思学术类 Task 1 图表,主题为 C20 a T1。

完整考生作文

The illustration show information about a public library in a city which called Little Charfont. The member of library is mostly compose by Adults. It is around in half, the rawest is adults 65 and over. Fiction is the most popular category either children or adults. Both of them are recorded by 38%. Wheras, nonfiction is less popular than fiction. It is 13% and 6% for children. The visualisation's categories, such as DVDs and audio books are lowest in the same binding which is total number of loans. The bar is starting as the lowest in 2007. It is about 15,000. However, It has been slowly rised up until 2011. Unfortunately, It is likely to decrease as 2009 during 2012 to 2013. Nevertheless, It has been surprisingly increased by 2016. In 2016, It break new record In the chart. It could be about 21,000!

官方考官完整点评

This response does present data for each of the charts, and generally answers the question. There is limited detail though, for example, when describing the pie chart for the age of library members, we are told that the members are mostly adults, and those 65 and over are the [rawest]. There is no mention of children and young adults, and no reporting of the data in the pie chart itself. This means that only limited details are presented. Ideas are organised, and there is an underlying sense of meaning but some lack of progression. Sentences are not fluently linked to each other. Cohesive devices tend to be overused [which | Both | such as | However | Unfortunately | Nevertheless], and some are faulty [Wheras / Whereas]. There is some reference [It], but this is used repetitively, especially in the last paragraph. There is an attempt to use a range of vocabulary [less popular | visualisation's | break new record]; however, overall, the frequency of error, and the mistakes in word choice [rawest / lowest | binding / ?] limit the score for vocabulary. The range of grammatical structures is also limited. The response should be written using past tenses, as the data covers 2007 to 2016, but is mostly written in the present tense. Sentences are generally short, and the level of error is noticeable for the reader. This response could be improved by including an appropriate overview, and providing greater accuracy across vocabulary and grammatical structures.
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Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 3

Academic A类 · Task 2

官方评分7.5分
字数
272
题型
Task 2议论文

完整作文题目

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether. Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

完整考生作文

Many people nowadays have decided to stop flying or to limit the amount of times they use this form of transport. This will undoubtedly have great benefits for the environment, but it may mean that for individuals or businesses this can translate to higher expenses. I believe the disadvantages for individuals and businesses would be greater than the effects on the environment. This essay will discuss advantages and disadvantages of this. Environmental benefits of reduced air travel would have a direct effect in the amount of pollution in the air, which would mean a greener planet. However, this would also mean a rise in the use of other types of transportation. For example, if the amount of cars, buses or trucks on the road increases this also means greenhouse gas emissions increase too. On the other hand, for individuals or businesses this could mean higher travelling costs, as well as lengthy trips and possible delays in reaching their destinations. All of this can affect the companies resources and even possibly cause them to lose business deals, or not even commence them due to restricted trading times. Higher costs for companies can cause job cuts which can have devastating effects for families. In conclusion, I believe the disadvantages on individuals and businesses caused by a reduction in air travel are far greater. The potential implications for companies of higher travel and shipping costs, could reflect losses that can eventuate in job cuts. The effects on the environment would not be enough to merit such a drastic culture change and possibly pollution levels could rise as a result of the increase on other contaminants.

官方考官完整点评

This is a strong, detailed and well-developed response. There are several appropriate ideas; the position is presented in the first paragraph and it is evidenced consistently. To improve this response, there could be more detail on the impact on 'individuals' as most of the examples refer to 'businesses'. The ideas are organised logically and the paragraphs support overall coherence. Cohesion is used well throughout, and the message can be followed easily. Vocabulary is fluently and flexibly used [translate to higher expenses | devastating effects | potential implications] with accurate spelling and only occasional errors in word choice [commence them / start them | eventuate in / result in]. Similarly, the range of grammatical structures is wide. There are frequent multi-clause sentences and the response is mostly error free.
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Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 4

Academic A类 · Task 1

官方评分6.0分
字数
195
题型
A类小作文

完整作文题目

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
雅思学术类 Task 1 题目图片,主题为 C20 a T1。

完整考生作文

The given diagram describes the process of manufacturing bamboo fabrics. Overall, the process includes a few main stages, which are showen on the diagram and are numbered from 1 to 8. The first stage, obviously, consists of planting and growing bamboo plants, usually happening in spring. The second phase, We could say harvesting one, is happening in the middle part of the year in autumn. Bamboo stems are cutting off by the season workers, collecting and sendening to the special plants during this period. In the plants, what are showed a the third and the forth stages. on the diagram, the bamboo stems are cutting into long strips, then produced strips are crushing to make liquid pulp. During the next phase these pulp is filtering through the special types of sieves to separate long fibres from liquid. Then the fibres, filtered by previous step, are being undergone through the softenning procedure. This procedure includes adding water and amine oxide. The seventh stage is the sppinning the soften fibres to make a strong bamboo thread. Produced yarns might be used to make fabric, which is the last - eighth phase, by weaveing them using special equipment.

官方考官完整点评

This is generally a good response, and it presents the key stages shown in the process. There is an overview, but it is rather generic and only tells us how many main stages there are [main stages ... are numbered from 1 to 8]. To improve the overview, instead of reporting the number of stages, there should be a summary of the main stages. Ideas are arranged logically. There are some nice linking expressions, appropriate for a 'process' [The first stage | then | During the next phase | which is] but there is some repetition [The first stage | The second phase | third and the forth stages | next phase | seventh stage | eighth phase]. Most of the sentences start on a new line - this means paragraphing is not present. Vocabulary is appropriate and spelling is generally well managed but there are errors. Grammatical structures are mixed but errors in verb forms are noticeable, particularly in passive structures [are cutting / are cut | are being undergone / undergo]. To achieve a higher score, the candidate should present an overview which summarises the main stages and paragraphing should be used to better organise the stages.
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Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 4

Academic A类 · Task 2

官方评分7.0分
字数
282
题型
Task 2议论文

完整作文题目

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends. How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

完整考生作文

The way many of us are dressed today is believed to be affected by the fashion industry. The reason why it is so importent for some people to choose their clothes according to the trends may be in our dependence on what is popular at the moment which is a double-edged sword. Of course, trying to keep up with modern fads consumes pretty much time and energy, but is it really that negative in terms of maintainig individuality? To my mind, it is not. Not surprisingly, global fashion has influenced people's tastes in clothing a great deal. We all see those celebrities on TV and on the Internet boasting their brand new outfit making many men and women jealous. Would blond hair in concert with a white dress have been so popular back in the day if it had not been for the voloptious Marlyn Monroe? world-wide famous fashion designers keep surprising consumers with their wild imagination producing more and more types of style. For instance over-sized winter coats have drawn attention not only from the youth but from the middle-aged as well. Fashions by many are believed to dictate people how to look. They impose new styles, and some people wear certain clothes just because another designer told them to do so. Looking on the bright side, there's absolutely no harm in getting advice from the fashion industry on what to wear this season. Moderation is the key. Do not overdo it. If you put on a garment that is really comfortable and suitable for you, it does not really matter whether it is fashionable or not. Your individuality won't be hurt if you simply like something that is in trend.

官方考官完整点评

This is a strong response overall. The first part, on the influence of global fashion trends is clear and detailed: people are influenced because they see celebrities on TV and the internet, want to copy famous icons like Marilyn Monroe, continue to be surprised by designers' wild imagination and experience more and more styles. The response to the second part is less well covered. The 'negative' side of this question is not addressed very thoroughly, apart from saying it takes [time and energy] to keep up with modern fads. The 'positives' include that there is [no harm in getting advice] on what to wear. More focus on the second part would improve the response. Progression is logical. Linking expressions are appropriate [Of course | For instance | Looking on the bright side] with some good examples of reference [their | those | another] and paragraphing is helpful (although paragraphs 3 and 4 could be combined as they cover the same idea). Vocabulary use is strong with some precise meanings and effective collocation [keep up | modern fads | influenced people's tastes | impose new styles]. There are some small slips in spelling [importent | maintainig | voloptious] although the meaning is clear. Sentences are varied and contain complex structures. There are multi-clause sentences with a range of structures, including conditionals [if], but a few errors remain. Overall, this is a good response. To achieve a higher score, the candidate should include a few more ideas around the 'positive or negative' influence of global fashion trends.
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Cambridge IELTS 20 · General Training Test 1

General Training G类 · Task 1

官方评分6.5分
字数
249
题型
书信

完整作文题目

It is ten years since you left college. You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college. Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter • say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise • explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way • describe what help you need to organise this event Dear ....................................,

完整考生作文

Dear Risham, Good morning! Long time no see, hope you doing well. Do you still remember me? I am singing genius, that was a nickname you gave me 13 years ago. Also, for sure. I miss you so much! As you know, we were left college for about 10 years. So I want to celebrate this 10th anniversary with our classmate and friends. Honestly, I do no know what should we do at first: but I remembered that in the last month of our college lives, Jessica let us to wrote a letter to the 10 years later’s us. I think this letter can be the theme of our anniversary. Moreover, we can bring some gifts to our firends and classmates. This will be a great chance to remind our enjoyful and lovely teenager school lives. I’m really curious about the letter, I can’t remember anything of the letter. I really hope I did not write nay embrassing events. However, could you please help me to contact with Jessica and ask her about the letters? If you can I will really appreciate that. Meanwhile, I’m going to contact with Jasmeen and Annie, they were the “Social Queen” of our school; they might can help us to contact with our classmates and friends. Then we can build a group chat to discuss the details of our 10th anniversary. Talk to you later! I really want to say that again: I really miss you! See you later! Your Bestie, Singing Genius.

官方考官完整点评

This letter is a strong response and it covers each area of the task, including: an idea for the kind of celebration, reasons for using the letters they wrote 10 years ago as part of the celebration, and asking for help to contact the other school friends. Organisation of ideas is generally logical and there is a clear progression. Linking devices are used well, with a range of referencing [me | this], although there is some inaccurate use [10 years later’s us] and repetition [letter]. Overall coherence is variable. There is appropriate vocabulary [theme | ask her about | really appreciate that | build a group chat] but noticeable errors [firends / friends | enjoyful / enjoyable]. There are some effective grammatical structures, including modals and a conditional [If] form and some examples of multi-clause sentences. However, there are errors [they might can help us]. Overall, sentences are short and the level of error in grammar does have an impact on the score. To achieve a higher score, a greater range of vocabulary and grammatical structures should be included.
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Cambridge IELTS 20 · General Training Test 1

General Training G类 · Task 2

官方评分7.0分
字数
390
题型
Task 2议论文

完整作文题目

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby. What's your opinion about this?

完整考生作文

I absolutely agree that everyone should have hobbies, at any stage of their life. As “hobby”, I consider any activities tha someone do for pleasure purposes only. For example, children and young adults have their time at school, they do different sorts of activities, but they have a educational purpose. Children and young adults should be able to get home and do something only for fun. Even when the activity involves learning something, when it’s a hobby, there’s no pressure, no stress, only the fact that they’re doing what they enjoy, for fun. Such as playing an instrument, or only listening to music, playing outdoors with friends, painting, playing sports, etc. A hobby can involve commitment, or not. In my case, I used to play with friends on the street when I was a kid. This was my hobby. As I was growing up, I started to listen to music and play guitar and found myself enjoying other hobbies. The same applies for retired people. They should all have hobbies in their lifes. After so many years spent mostly working, it’s great for them having some activities to focus on. But, again, no pressure involved. Retired people usually have more free time to spend doing what they actually enjoy, so, if they have the chance, the should accumulate as many hobbies as they can and relax during retirement. People then might find easy to say that kids, teenagers and retired people should have hobbies, since they usually have more free time. But what about working people? Yes, they definitely should have hobbies, and I would say that they need those. Bring a working person nowadays it’s not easy. People spend several hours at work, on the way to work, on the way back home, taking care of their family, cleaning their houses, doing shopping, cooking the next day’s lunch, etc. They’re plenty of tasks that can’t be skipped, so, when do these people enjoy themselves and do something for fun? It’s important to have this in mind and value any free time doing any sort of hobby that make them feel relaxed, instead of productive. Working people are the ones who mostly need a hobby, so they can enjoy life as it should be enjoyed, with no pressure, deadlines or bosses. Just doing something because it makes them feel good.

官方考官完整点评

This is a strong response which covers each aspect of the task, and includes all the age categories: children, young adults, working people, the retired. The position is clear, that [everyone should have hobbies]. Ideas are well organised and sentences are linked together effectively [Even when | Such as | But what about...?] with some effective use of referencing [This | The same applies | these people | who], making this response easy to read and logical. There are a handful of errors and quite frequent repetition of [they]. Vocabulary is strong, with examples of good collocation [accumulate ... hobbies | have this in mind | makes them feel good]. Only a few errors remain [tha / that | lifes / lives | Bring / Being]. Similarly, a good range of grammatical structures is used, including modal forms [should | I would say | can’t be skipped] and comparatives [more]. A few grammatical errors remain, such as article use and subject/verb agreement [do / does | make / makes]. This is already a strong response, but to achieve the highest ratings, the ideas could be more fully developed around ‘young adults’ and the conclusion could refer back to all the categories being presented. There is also room for even greater levels of accuracy in cohesion, vocabulary and grammatical structures. It would also be helpful to avoid the ‘one sentence paragraphs’ to ensure paragraphing supports the sequencing of ideas within each section of the response.
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Cambridge IELTS 20 · General Training Test 2

General Training G类 · Task 1

官方评分5.5分
字数
152
题型
书信

完整作文题目

The younger sister of one of your friends is thinking about spending a year studying abroad as part of her university course. You did this recently, and she has asked you about your experience. Write a letter to your friend's sister. In your letter • tell her where you studied during your year abroad • describe what you learnt about the country you studied in • explain why your year abroad was helpful for your studies Dear .....................,

完整考生作文

Dear Matilda, Thank you for your question in related on study abroad as you know. Well, I went to griffith university in Australia in 2015. I studied nursing and it took me four and half years to achieve. However, finally I graduated in the early of february 2020. As you know, study abroad is challenging. My first day in Australia was annoying. I did not have any friends to comunicate with. So rang my mom and talk with her. But, a month later I got along with many international friends. The reason I chose to study overseas was that the education system in Australia is better in our own country. There were lots of practical rather than theory. And also the lectures and students are friendly and helpful. Studying abroad is helpful because it easy to get a job. I have being working in Timorese International hospital for two years. Good luck.

官方考官完整点评

This response covers the main points within the task. The writer addresses the first bullet point, ‘where’ they studied, and the third, ‘how the year was helpful’. However, there is no real answer to the second bullet point around, ‘what you learnt about the country you studied in’. To improve task achievement, some information about what they learned about Australia should be included. The letter is logically organised and the ideas can be followed, although the linking words are quite simple and repetitive [So | But | And also] and there is some inaccurate use [As you know]. A wider range of linking devices would improve the rating. There is some good use of vocabulary [to achieve | challenging | reason I chose to] but there are errors in word choice [early of] and the range is rather limited. Similarly, the grammatical range is limited, for example, inaccuracy in comparative forms [better in / better than in | easy / easier] and does cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve the score, the second bullet point around ‘what you learnt about the country you studied in’ should be included and a wider range of accurate vocabulary and grammatical structures.
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Cambridge IELTS 20 · General Training Test 2

General Training G类 · Task 2

官方评分7.0分
字数
266
题型
Task 2议论文

完整作文题目

In many countries, family members work together in their family business. Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

完整考生作文

I do think family owned businesses have more advantages than disadvantages. For businesses ran by family members, the members feel a strong sense of pride for the business and in that regard they are more vested in the positive outcome of the business. Meanwhile if the business has primarly employees running the business, for them it is just a pay-check. The success of failure of the business is not their responsibility. Therefore it may less likely be that a family owned will fail. One may argue however that the family members may not posess the required skill set for a particular job and that may spell disaster for the company. Hence it will be best to outsource the job to more qualified candidates. As true as this may be, the family has the option of choosing a member to be trained to fill specific roles. Another advantage of a family owned business is, the children are exposed to the business from very early in their lives. They are able to experience the inner workings of the company from different levels, this in turn would translate into a greater appreciation for the business. Currently I work for a large company which by in large a family owned company. The company has been around for more then 50 years, they have weathered many different economic climates and are able to still remain relevant in the business sphere. This is mainly due to the fact that the business has remained in the family. With its humble beginings the business has been able to generate wealth for over 4 generations.

官方考官完整点评

This is a strong response to the task. It is unfortunate that this candidate has not used paragraphing, as this is a requirement of IELTS Task 2, and the score for Coherence and Cohesion is limited due to this. The position is clear, and the ideas presented are relevant and well developed. The candidate agrees that there are more advantages, illustrates why they think this is true, and gives the example of the company that they currently work in. Apart from the lack of paragraphing, the message is very easy to follow. There are higher-level linking expressions [in that regard | Meanwhile | One may argue | As true as this may be] and cohesion is generally well managed, although there is some repetition due to some lack of reference [business]. Vocabulary is flexibly used, with some skilful examples, and collocation [strong sense of pride | spell disaster | outsource the job | greater appreciation | remain relevant | generate wealth]. Some minor spelling errors remain [primarly | posess | beginings]. Grammatical structures are also flexibly used, with the majority of sentences without error, and examples of multi-clause sentences. Occasional errors remain [ran / run], including in word order [may less likely be / may be less likely]. This is an example of a response that has suffered a penalty for the absence of paragraphing. The band score could be improved by the use of paragraphing, to support the sequencing of ideas within this high-level response.
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Cambridge IELTS 20 · General Training Test 3

General Training G类 · Task 1

官方评分6.0分
字数
189
题型
书信

完整作文题目

You work for an entertainment company which plans to open a new theatre soon. You want to invite a famous actor to open the new theatre. Write a letter to this famous actor. In your letter - give some information about the new theatre - invite her/him to open the new theatre - explain why she/he would be a good person to open the theatre Dear ______________ ,

完整考生作文

Dear Mr Smart, I am... ..., the manager of K entertainment company. I am writing to invite you to the new theatre we are going to open soon. The new theatre is buiit for both new actor and musician who are talented but have not given any opportunities and public who would like to enjoy new cultural experiences. The famous architect Mr oh drew this building and a variety of people from different fields joined to this project to be completed. Finally, this newly built theatre is going to open on 17 March. I was wondering if you could come and join to the new start of it. I understand you are very hectic with a lot of schedules but it would be greatly appreciated if you could come and congratulate this new start. It will be very meaningful time for not only you but also audiences who know you effort as you have been funderising for some organizations that suffer from finance issues but pass the cultural services over. I hope you can come and enjoy together this openning. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Regards,

官方考官完整点评

This response is a good attempt; the writer has addressed all the bullet points: information about the new theatre includes who it is built for, the name of the architect and the reason it was built, the actor is invited, and the reasons why he would be a good person include his work in fundraising for cultural organisations that suffer finance issues. There could be more expansion on the third bullet point for a higher task achievement score. The tone is appropriate to make this request to a famous actor. Organisation of ideas is generally logical, with linking devices used well [Finally | but] with some effective use of referencing [who | this project | it] although cohesion within sentences can be faulty. Vocabulary is generally good, with some examples of a wider range of resource [talented | new cultural experiences | from different fields] but overall, the errors in word choice are noticeable [congratulate this new start | pass the cultural services over]. The errors in spelling do not impede communication [buiit | funderising | openning]. Similarly, there are some effective grammatical structures, including [if] structures and multi-clause sentences. However, overall, these structures are not always very accurate. There are errors with plural forms [actor and musician] prepositions [join to] and articles. For a higher score, the third bullet point could be expanded, and greater accuracy in linking expressions, vocabulary and grammar would also be helpful.
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Cambridge IELTS 20 · General Training Test 3

General Training G类 · Task 2

官方评分7.5分
字数
300
题型
Task 2议论文

完整作文题目

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger. Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

完整考生作文

Eternal youth has always been some type of desired myth on every civilization. Even if science has already proven that it is impossible for humans to stop the process of getting older, it is possible, on a surface level, to make this process less visible. Nowadays there are tons of brands and laboratories especialised on products that retard the natural aging of our skin. The primary components on those types of products are collagen and hyaluronic acid, which is great, because our organism already produces those naturally, but as we get older, it decreases the productions, causing flacid and dull skin. The big concern on this topic is the beauty standarts and how it affects peoples self steem. It is not seen, anymore, as a natural, human thing to get the appearance of being old. On platforms such as Instagram and Youtube, there are a lot of content creators that advertise products of that kind and reinforce that the real beauty is to be young. On that note, as much as it is not dangerous and unhealthy, on a phisical level, to use those products — when we talk about those that are tested and approved by vigilance organisations — it is very compromising for people’s mental health to be subjected to this extent of standart, one that makes them think that a natural process shouldn’t be happening to them. On another side, we have the treatments made on clinics, and those can be seen as dangerous. Modifying their bodys and injecting substances on them are the easiest way for people to mantain the youth, - again, on a surface level — but the real question is, at what cost, what good can this give them? None, should be the answer, but people go throught any pain to be accepted.

官方考官完整点评

This is an example of a strong response. It certainly explores the topic and includes reference to the products and the treatments that people pay for to look younger. The position becomes clearer as the response develops. Ideas are communicated well, and include: the products people use, the impact of social media on self-esteem, and the mental health implications of ageing (to think we should not be ageing). The conclusion is appropriate: that these dangerous treatments have no real benefits, but people do it to be accepted. This is already a strong response, but there is room to develop and clarify what the writer thinks are the benefits and drawbacks of having access to these products and treatments. The response is easy to read, with good cohesion. Ideas are logically ordered, with effective paragraphing to support overall coherence. There is a range of cohesive devices [Even if | Nowadays | The big concern | On platforms | On that note | On another side]. However, as almost every sentence starts with a linking device, there is some ‘overuse’. Vocabulary is flexible, with some good collocation and higher-level items [Eternal youth | content creators | to be subjected to] with only a few errors in spelling [especialised | self steem | phisical | standart] or word form [vigilance / vigilant]. Similarly, there is a wide range of grammatical structures, including comparatives [less visible | easiest way] and multi-clause sentences, but a few errors remain. To achieve the highest ratings, the candidate should link the points more tightly to whether it is ‘a good or bad thing’ for people to spend their money in this way, and demonstrate a greater degree of accuracy in vocabulary.