The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
Sample Response
The table presents data on people living in povertydata regarding the poor families of different household types in Australia in 1999. Generally speaking, 11% of people across all Australian households11% of all Australian households lived in poverty in 1999, and among them, sole parents and single people without childrensingles without any child had the highest percentageswere the highest in percentages that lived in hardship. According to the given data, more than 1.8 million peoplefamilies in Australia lived in povertyeconomic misfortune in 1999 representing 11%that formed 11% of people across all household typesof the total households. Among them, around 50 thousand people living in povertyaround 50 thousand poor families were in each ofcame from both the single-aged-person and aged-couple household typessingle aged person and aged couple type families which represented 6% and 4%who formed 6% and 4% of their respective household typesthe total of that family types. Sole parents and singles without children formed the largest percentages of people in povertythe largest percentage of poor families and their percentages were respectivelyconsecutively 21% and 19% of their family types. The highest percentage of poor families was from sole parents and the largest number of people in povertythe highest number of the needy family was from couples-with-children household typecouples with children type. Comparatively, couples without children had a lower poverty ratecouple with no child had less poverty percentage than the single with no children family types. It is obvious that older Australianssenior Austrlains suffered less from poverty than the sole parents and single persons with no child.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response selects the main contrasts effectively, highlighting the highest poverty rates among sole-parent and single-adult households, the relatively low rates for older households, and the largest count for couples with children. Its main weakness is the repeated misidentification of people as families or households, alongside awkward wording and limited paragraph structure. The highest priority is to preserve the table's units precisely and organize the overview and supporting comparisons into clear paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and the principal high and low comparisons are presented, although the numerical counts are repeatedly and inaccurately described as families rather than people.
Retain the table's unit by describing every bracketed figure as a number of people and include the 12% rate for couples with children alongside their leading count.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information follows a generally logical sequence, but presenting the entire report as one paragraph weakens the separation between the overview and supporting details.
Use separate paragraphs for the overview and detailed comparisons, grouping the higher-risk non-aged households apart from the lower-risk aged and childless-couple categories.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonably varied vocabulary for proportions and comparison, but several choices are awkward or imprecise, including economic misfortune, consecutively, and needy family.
Use neutral statistical wording such as people living in poverty, respectively, accounted for, and household category to improve precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of structures communicates the comparisons, but recurring errors with plurals, articles, agreement, and noun phrases reduce grammatical control.
Check that plural subjects take plural nouns and verbs, and simplify phrases such as the total of those family types before adding subordinate clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
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