The table gives information about five types of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
Sample Response
The yielded table illustrates the number and percentage of change of five different transportation modes in Australia in 2010, 212 and 2014.
Overall, the number of registered vehiclesyear by year registered vehicle number rose across all five vehicle types, andin all types of vehicles in addition, throughout the period passenger vehicles were the most numerouspassenger vehicles had the most vehicles whereas light trucksalthough, light trucks had the least.
For passengerpassengers vehicles, 11,800,000 vehicles were in 2010; the figure then roseit goes upwardly later. To reachreaching 13,000,000 only four years were neededonly 6 years taken, percentage of change was 10.2%one in tenth. For motorcycles, the number of this vehicle was 540000 in 2012, after two years it jumps up 140000, in 2014 had 709000 and six years change was the zenith, one-third proportion. For light trucks, the least numerous category, there were onlywith the least vehicle, it had only 106000 in 2010, this number was 131000 in 2014 and the percentage changealthough, changes percentage was second-highest at 23.5%on account of a quarter.
For commercial vehicles, with the second position in 2010, 2300,000 registered vehicles were in this category it climbed continually 200,000 after 2 years gap. The percentage change was 17.4%17.4% changed percentage. For heavy trucks, in 2010, the number was 384,000in 2012, the number was 384000 and grew slowly to 390000 and 416000 in 2012 and 2014, respectivelyin 2012, 2014 respectively. The percentage change was 8.3%8.3% changed proportion.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the main overall patterns and includes figures for every vehicle category, which gives it reasonable coverage. Its main limitation is unreliable reporting of years, intervals, and several data points, while frequent awkward sentence construction reduces clarity. The highest priority is to check every figure against the table and express comparisons in complete, accurately controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview identifies universal growth, passenger vehicles as the largest category, and light trucks as the smallest, but several years and figures are reported inaccurately.
Verify each year-value pairing and make direct comparisons, especially for motorcycles, commercial vehicles, and heavy trucks.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overview and two detail paragraphs provide a recognizable structure, but run-on sentences and poorly controlled linking often disrupt progression.
Use shorter sentences and a small number of accurately placed linkers to separate each comparison clearly.
Lexical Resource
There is some range for describing quantities and change, but frequent unnatural choices such as 'goes upwardly' and 'changed proportion' reduce precision.
Prefer standard data-reporting phrases such as 'rose to', 'increased by', and 'accounted for the highest percentage change'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and attempted complex structures communicate the broad message, although errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries are frequent.
Build complete subject-verb clauses and check tense, agreement, and punctuation before adding subordinate phrases.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table gives information about five types of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
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