The graph below shows the average class size in six countries and compares it with the world’s average class size in 2006.
Sample Response
The bar graph illustrates the information about the average class sizepercentage of children in primary and lower secondary schoolsat the primary school and lowest secondary schools of different age groups in six nationsNations and also the world average in 2006.
According to the chart, the proportion of Southsouth Korean primary students had less secondary school, about 34 and 36 students34% and 38%, respectively. At the same time, Japan was an average class size of about 27 students26% of the student average in primary academy whereas the lower secondary figure was about 31 studentssecondary school figure was 32%. Meanwhile, the average primary class size was 15 students15% of primary children in Iceland and 17 students in lower secondary school17% in the lower secondary institute.
On the other hand, UK and Denmark had similar primary class sizeshave a similar percentage of primary school, around 22%, wherein school was increased slightly from 21% to 18%. Moving further, for the world averageon world average the average primary class sizesecond-highest number of children in primary school was about 26 studentswas 27% although in the secondary academy was the fourth place of pupils proportions nearly 18%.
Overall, South Korea was the largest class sizefirst higher proportion of pupils in primary school as well as lower secondary school, while, While Iceland had the smallest class sizesleast class size for both the institutes.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response provides a recognizable overview and some relevant comparisons, especially the highest and lowest countries. Its main weakness is incomplete and unreliable coverage: Mexico is omitted, class sizes are repeatedly presented as percentages, and several figures or comparisons are inaccurate. Prioritize selecting all major features from the chart and checking units and values before writing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview identifies the highest and lowest countries, but Mexico is omitted and several units, values, and comparisons are inaccurate.
Report class sizes as numbers of pupils and cover Mexico and the world averages with carefully checked figures.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is divided into logical sections, but progression is weakened by unclear comparisons and mechanical linking.
Group countries by similar patterns and make each comparison explicit before moving to the next group.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to describe the chart, but frequent inappropriate choices such as academy, institute, and proportion reduce precision.
Use accurate chart language such as average class size, pupils, higher, lower, and compared with.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and clause formation sometimes make the comparisons difficult to follow.
Build complete comparison sentences with one clear subject and verb, then check agreement and articles.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the average class size in six countries and compares it with the world’s average class size in 2006.
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