The chart shows average levels of rainfall in Marley in the UK.
Sample Response
The bar graph describes the usual amount of rainfallamount of rain precipitate over a year in Marley, UK. It can be clearly seen that September, January and DecemberDecember, September and January have the highest amount of rainfall recorded during the yearrainfall noted in a year. Turning to the monthly figuresPrimarily, from December to September, the amount of rainfall increases from about 84mm to approximately 94mm. the rainfall in October has an identical amount in December by about 84mm. Interestinglyinterestingly, the level of rainfall dramatically declines from September to May, which reaches about 54 mm in Maylevels off at about 51mm. However, this trend does not last as rainfallwhen the rain precipitate rises slightlyminimally rises in April (about 55 mm)April (58mm) and is followed by a moderate increasesoar in March by approximately 58 mmapproximately 64mm. Moving backwards to February, the figure decreases slightlyIn February, the figure decreases but it is followed by a sharptremendous increase in January that reaches roughly 79 mmreaches by roughly 79mm. Overall, there is a drop in rainfall in the middle of the year, yet it increases dramatically in the latersucceeding months.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the broad mid-year dip and some of the wetter months, and its meaning remains generally understandable despite ambitious wording. However, numerous values are overstated, the months are discussed in a confusing reverse sequence, and several comparisons are inaccurate or unclear. The highest priority is to organise the report chronologically and verify each figure against the chart, using simpler, more precise language for changes.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A broad overview is present and some main movements are recognised, but several rainfall figures and comparisons do not match the chart.
Report the accurate values, such as September at about 82 mm and the mid-year low near 54 mm, and compare months in a clear sequence.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are linked with a range of cohesive devices, but the single paragraph and reverse movement through the months make progression difficult to follow.
Use an overview paragraph followed by logically grouped details, preferably moving chronologically from January to December or grouping wetter and drier months.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts varied language for trends, but frequent miscollocations such as references to rain precipitate and a moderate soar reduce precision.
Prefer accurate combinations such as rainfall rose, fell, remained stable, and reached a peak, avoiding exaggerated trend words for small changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms conveys the main meaning, although frequent article, preposition, capitalisation, and clause-control errors weaken accuracy.
Check sentence openings, articles, and verb-preposition patterns, especially structures used to describe figures reaching or changing to a value.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart shows average levels of rainfall in Marley in the UK.
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