The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
Sample Response
The line graph shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited fourcertain Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010. We can see that in 1980 and in 2010 the favourite attractions were the pavilion and the festival. In 1980 the least popular attraction was the pier, but in 2010the pier but in 2010 this changed and the art gallery was the least popular.
From 1980 to 1995During the 1980s and 1990s there was a sharp increase in visitors to the pavilion from 2428% to 48% and then the percentage gradually went down to 31% in 2010. The trend for the art gallery was similar to the pavilion. The proportion of visitors to the art gallery increased rapidlyVisitors increased rapidly from 22% to 37% from 1980 to 1985, thenfrom 1980 to 1985 then gradually decreased to less than 10% over the next twenty-five years. The percentagenumber of tourists who visited the Brighton Festival fluctuated slightly but in general remained steady at about 25%. The percentage visiting the pier also fluctuatedVisitors to the pier also fluctuated from 1980 to 2000 then rose significantly from 12% to 22% between 2000 and 2010.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response selects and reports all four series clearly, using relevant figures and a strong summary of the most and least popular attractions at the endpoints. The main weakness is minor imprecision in timing and values, particularly describing the pavilion’s rise as beginning at 28% and treating the festival as steady at about 25%. Prioritise exact dates and starting values when summarising trends.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and comprehensive coverage of all four attractions are supported by mostly accurate data, despite a few small numerical imprecisions.
Check the pavilion’s 1980 starting point and describe the festival’s modest decline from 30% more precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organised into a purposeful overview and a logically sequenced detail paragraph with controlled progression.
Use a clearer grouping principle, such as pairing the two sharply changing lines and the two steadier lines.
Lexical Resource
Trend vocabulary is accurate and sufficiently varied, though some repeated nouns and general verbs limit flexibility slightly.
Vary references to percentages and trajectories while preserving the response’s clear, precise wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A strong range of complex sentence forms is used with high accuracy and only minor punctuation lapses.
Add punctuation at clause boundaries, especially before contrasting clauses and after introductory time phrases.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
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