The chart shows the number of visitors to a local cinema according to age in 2000.
Sample Response
The given pie chart gives information about the local cinema-goerslocal cinema goers in the year 2000. The visitors to the cinema are divided into 5 main categories based on their age and the percentages of their numbers indicate that elder people went to movies more than younger people.
As showngiven in the chart, the percentage of people aged 55 and overolder (over 54 years old) people who went to the cinema comprised 51%comprises more than half of the total cinema visitors. This indicates the cinema-going patternthe trend of cinema watching tendency of older people. They went to visit cinema hall more frequently than all other cinema viewers.
People who were between 31 to 45 years old showed the least interest and their percentage of visiting cinema went lowest (only 5%). Among the other three age groups (aged 10 to 30)( aged from 10 to 30), younger people showed more interestinterests than adults and thus the 10–15 age groupthe age group 10-15 accounted for a larger share thanwent to watch cinema more than the other two age groupsother two age groups. After age 20After the age 20, the proportion of cinema visitorsthe interest of going to cinema declined according to the graph and that proportion increased dramaticallythat increased dramatically for the oldest groupamong the older people.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response has a clear basic structure and identifies the largest and smallest age groups, so the central pattern is easy to follow. Its main limitation is that it reports very few of the chart’s percentages and repeatedly interprets visitor shares as frequency or interest, claims the visual does not establish. The highest priority is to compare all five groups with accurate figures and avoid unsupported behavioural conclusions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report identifies the dominant 55-and-over group and the smallest 31–45 group, but supporting data are sparse and several interpretations are unsupported.
Report the five shares directly—51%, 21%, 15%, 8%, and 5%—and describe proportions rather than inferred interest or visit frequency.
Coherence and Cohesion
The three-paragraph structure provides clear overall progression, though the second paragraph repeats the same older-visitor point rather than extending the comparison.
Combine the overview into one concise statement and organise the details into the older majority versus the four smaller groups.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate vocabulary for categorisation and comparison, but imprecise collocations such as ‘elder people’ and ‘more interests’ recur.
Use precise forms such as ‘older people,’ ‘accounted for,’ ‘the smallest proportion,’ and ‘showed greater interest’ only when the data supports interest.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex sentences, but frequent article, preposition, plural, and clause-control errors reduce accuracy.
Correct forms such as ‘between 31 and 45,’ ‘the other two age groups,’ and ‘after age 20,’ while checking articles and plural nouns.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart shows the number of visitors to a local cinema according to age in 2000.
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