The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment.
Sample Response
The diagramprovided flowchart illustrates the process of consumer goods production Deletein an orderly manner and includes various stages of production and sales together with the feedback supplied totowards the earlier stages which allows improvements and modifications throughout the process.
The product manufacturing process beginsprocess is initiated with the purchase of raw materials and manufactured components, which are keptmanufactured components which are kept in storage until the production process is planned. Product research feeds into design, while production planning leads to assemblyProduction planning stage involves product research and design. The process continues throughThe process is carried through the stages of assembly, inspection, testing and packaging of the final product sequentially andwhich is then dispatched for sale to consumerssales to the consumers.
Feedback from later stages returns to storage and production planningProduction planning provides feedback for storage. Likewise, sales provide feedback for both production planning and market research, which in turn provides feedback for advertising and packaging. Similarly, both market research and testing provide feedback for design.
In summary, this flowchart illustrates the production process and the feedback provided at various stages of goods manufacturing.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is strongest in its clear overview, logical sequencing, and coverage of both the main manufacturing stages and several information-feedback loops. Its chief weakness is that it blurs the relationship among product research, design, and production planning and leaves some feedback links imprecise; prioritise separating the production flow from the feedback flow and tracing each connection accurately.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response gives a clear process overview and covers the main manufacturing sequence and several feedback loops. It slightly misrepresents the relationship between product research, design, and production planning, and the feedback from sales to earlier stages could be described more precisely.
State that raw materials and components enter storage, production planning leads to assembly, and product research feeds into design rather than being part of production planning.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing is clear and the sequence is easy to follow. The feedback paragraph is useful, but some links between feedback arrows could be more explicitly ordered.
Separate the main production flow from the information feedback flow, then trace feedback from sales, testing, and market research back to earlier stages.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is generally appropriate for a process diagram, with terms such as assembly, inspection, testing, packaging, and dispatch. A few phrases are slightly wordy or mechanical.
Use concise process wording such as begins with, moves to, is stored, is dispatched, and feeds back to.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is mostly controlled, though there are some long noun phrases and relative clauses that could be smoother.
Add commas around non-defining clauses and avoid long passive constructions where a shorter active process clause is clearer.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment.
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