The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Sample Response
The chart illustrates electricity consumption and production in the ten leading countriestop ten highest countries in 2014. It is clear from the chart that all countries, with the exception of Germany, produce marginally more than they consume. The two top countries, the United States and particularly China, were clearstrong outliers while the remaining countries had similar numbers and lagged far behind in both production and consumption.
China produced and consumed the most, at 5,398 and 5,322 billion kWh5,398 billion and 5,322 kWh, respectively. The next-highest countryThe next nearest country in terms of both statistics was the US, where residents consumed 3,866 billion kWhkilowats an hour and produced slightly more, at 4,099 billion kWhproduced slightly more at 4,099.
Russia ledRussian lead the rest of the nations with 1,057 (in production) and 1,038 billion kWh1,038 kWh (consumption) followed by Japan (936.2 billion kWh for production936.2 for production and 856.7 billion kWh for consumption856.7 kWh for consumption). India and Canada ranked 5th and 6th with India producing 871 kWh and consuming 698.8 while Canada was slightly lower in both (618.9 and 499.9 kWh). In seventh and eighth placeIn the 7th and 8th spots were France (producing 561.2 billion kWhproducing 561.2 kWh and consuming 462.9 billion kWhconsuming 462.9) and Brazil, which recorded figures ofrecorded numbers at 530.7 and 455.8 for production and consumption, respectively. In the final two positions were Germany and the Republic of Korea with Germany having higher production thanthat Korea (526.6 to 485.1 billion kWh526.6 to 485.1 kWh) as well as consumption (582.5 kWh compared with 449.5).
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response gives a clear overview and accurately covers all ten countries, with especially effective comparison of the two dominant producers and consumers against the remaining nations. Its main weakness is imprecise measurement language alongside several localised grammatical slips, so the highest-priority improvement is to state every figure consistently in billion kWh and proofread comparative forms, verb agreement, and spelling.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview identifies China and the United States as outliers, and nearly all figures and country comparisons are accurately selected.
State every value consistently in billion kWh so otherwise accurate data are never presented with misleading units.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from the overview and leading countries to a clearly ordered account of the remaining rankings.
For an even cleaner presentation, divide the long final paragraph into two balanced groups of countries.
Lexical Resource
A flexible range supports precise comparison, although phrases such as top ten highest countries and kilowatts an hour are awkward or inaccurate.
Use exact chart language such as electricity production, consumption, and billion kWh while avoiding unnecessary substitutes for countries and figures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex sentences are generally well controlled, with only local errors such as Russian lead and higher production that Korea.
Proofread past-tense verbs and comparative constructions, especially led rather than lead and than rather than that.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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