The line graph shows the cost of watching films. The pie charts show the change in the percentage of market share represented by the three forms.
Sample Response
The line graphs show the information on watching movies to spend money in three different formats from 2005 to 2011 and the pie charts show the information about how customers like to watch movies in three different forms. Overall, people always want to watch movies to spend money on DVDs because it is not that costly and anyone can watch it at home anytime.
The line graphA glance at line graphs shows the information on the cost of watching filmshow much movie cost to watch movies from 2005 to 2011. In 2005 the most expensive optionmost costly way to watch was a cinema ticket, which cost £9,going to movie theatres the cost was 9 pounds and over the period, this figure increased and ended atthrough the year to 2011 is always going to increase and ended up to 14 pounds in 2011. While DVDs and legal downloads wereDVD and Legal download are less expensive than cinema ticketsnot that expensive, DVD prices started atDVD cost started from 6 pounds and went to 8 pounds in 2011 and legal downloads costlegally download through the web in 2005 it costs 8 pounds and ended at £9ended up to 9 pounds in 2011.
The pie chartschart shows how users watch movies in three different formats. In 2005 people mainly rent a DVD the number was 64%, and only 30% watch movies in the cinema and the rest watch through the web. Meanwhile, in 2011, DVD rentals still held the largest shareDVD again won the race with 56%, but this time online viewing exceeded cinema attendancewatching movies online won the race over cinema. Online viewing accounted for 26%, compared with 18% for cinema attendance.(26% was legal to download and 18% at the cinema)
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response reports most endpoint values accurately and separates the cost graph from the market-share charts in a workable structure. Its main limitation is that the overview focuses narrowly on DVD preference and adds an unsupported explanation, while frequent awkward or faulty sentences weaken precision. Prioritise a factual overview of the dominant trends and use shorter, grammatically controlled comparison sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers both visuals and gives mostly accurate figures, but the overview omits major cost trends and includes unsupported reasons for DVD use.
Summarise the sharp rise in cinema-ticket prices and the shift from cinema to online viewing without speculating about consumer motives.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is grouped logically by visual, although several long sentences have weak internal progression and punctuation.
Divide overloaded sentences into clear comparisons and use linking words to show contrast rather than repeatedly adding clauses.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient to describe changes, but repetition and awkward phrases such as ‘won the race’ reduce precision and formality.
Use accurate chart language such as ‘accounted for,’ ‘rose to,’ ‘remained dominant,’ and ‘overtook’ consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains clear, but frequent errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, tense, articles, and verb forms limit grammatical control.
Build shorter complex sentences with one main clause and check subject-verb agreement and past-tense forms throughout.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph shows the cost of watching films. The pie charts show the change in the percentage of market share represented by the three forms.
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