The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India.
Sample Response
The pie charts exhibit four types of food consumptionconsumptions of the world with thosethat of China and India in 2008. Overall, processed food items were consumed at a higher percentage thanat the highest percentage than other food items and Chinese citizens were the highest consumersconsumer of nuts and seeds while Indians primarily relied on processed food and animal food. According to the pie charts, people of the world, as well as Deletethe China and India, ate processed food more than any other food item. Processed food accounted for 41% of global consumptionPeople ate almost 41% processed food in the world in 2008. This percentage was higher in India than China. On averageOn an average, 29% vegetable and fruits were consumedabsorbed by the world population while this percentage was 32% in China and 23% in India. Animal foodFoods from animals were the third largest consumed item and IndiansIndian ate more than the world average. Nuts and seeds consumed in India and China were higher than the world average in both countries, especially Chinamuch higher than the world average. It is worth noticing that Indian ate more animal foods than Chinese did while Chinese consumeddevoured more vegetables, fruits and seeds than Indians. On an average, Indian population consumed more animal foods and nuts and seedsseeds items than the world population whereas Chinese people consumedwhile Chinese people ate more vegetablesvegetable and seeds than the rest of the world.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear overview and makes several accurate comparisons across the world, China, and India, showing a sound grasp of the main patterns. Its main weakness is imprecision: some claims group China and India together despite substantial differences, and awkward wording plus repeated comparisons reduce clarity. Prioritize using exact figures for each food group, especially nuts and seeds, then organise the details into distinct comparison paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response accurately reports most key proportions and makes useful comparisons among the world, China, and India. It could be more precise about nuts and seeds, where China is much higher than both India and the world average.
Add exact figures for each food group and avoid broad claims that combine India and China when their percentages differ notably.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a clear overview and a logical sequence by food type, though the response is one long paragraph after the introduction and becomes repetitive near the end.
Use separate paragraphs for the overview and detailed comparisons, and avoid repeating the same final comparison.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate but sometimes unnatural, especially with "consumptions", "absorbed", and "devoured".
Use neutral Task 1 verbs such as consumed, accounted for, represented, and made up.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is usually clear, but there are recurring errors with plural nouns, articles, and nationality nouns.
Revise countable noun forms and use "Indians" or "the Indian population" consistently.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India.
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