The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in a foreign language in different countries.
Sample Response
The given bar graph depicts the percentagesthe summary of the percentage of students who are proficient in a foreign languagegood at foreign language in various countries. Overall, the male students lag behind in the skills among their female counterparts in all the countries, and India reveals the highest proficiency both in males and females and China the least in both categories in comparison with other nations. Exception in Thailand, where men are ahead of females in learning the foreign language.
Indian and Romanian females showfemale reveals high levels of foreign-language proficiencyhigher ability to master foreign language skills at 68% and 66% respectively. At the same time, Vietnam ranks at 58%, then 42% Russia. Female students in China and ThailandChina and Thailand females stand at 30% and about 27%28% in mastering the foreign language. The lowest figure is forThe least is observed in ThaiThailand women, at approximately 27%lacking in foreign language skills.
Although male students generally lag behind female studentsthe male counterpart lags, India still leads at about 56%approximate 58%. The remaining countriesThe rest nationalities are lower than 40 %, except Romania, at about 42%except Romania, slightly higher than 40%. Among the six countriesAmong all the six countries, Chinese males have the lowest figureChinese males are the least at about 17%at 18% in mastering the foreign language.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response selects the main patterns accurately and supports them with mostly reliable figures, including the gender exception in Thailand. Its main limitation is uneven language control: recurrent agreement, article and sentence-structure errors make several comparisons awkward, even though the meaning remains clear. The highest priority is to express each comparison in a complete, grammatically controlled sentence while preserving the accurate data selection.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview identifies the principal extremes and the Thailand exception, while most reported figures closely match the chart.
Use exact or consistently approximate figures and compare male and female proficiency rates more directly.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from an overview to separate discussion of female and male results, although a few transitions are abrupt.
Integrate the Thailand exception into a complete overview sentence and use smoother links between ranked figures.
Lexical Resource
Relevant vocabulary conveys the subject and comparisons, but awkward collocations and repeated references to mastering a foreign language reduce precision.
Use natural combinations such as foreign-language proficiency, the proportion of students, and was followed by.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of structures communicates the main information, but agreement, article, word-order and sentence-fragment errors recur throughout.
Prioritise complete comparative sentences with accurate plural subjects, verb agreement and noun phrases.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in a foreign language in different countries.
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