The table below highlights data on the number of travellers using three major German airports between 2007 and 2012.
Sample Response
The presented table compares the number of passengers in three major German airports between 2007 and 2012. The Frankfurt airport served more passengers than other airports and air travellers in these airports more than doubled in five years. As is provided as a census of a perusal, the given illustration gives passenger numbers at Dusseldorf, Berlin Tegel and Frankfurt airports. Initially, in 2007, more than 36 million people used Frankfurt airport, while 17.3 million used Berlin Tegel Airportpreferred Berlin Tegel airport. In the same year, Dusseldorf AirportDusseldorf airport, in this year, servedreceipted 27.2 million travellers. The number of Dusseldorf airport passengers roseswelled up until 2009 and peaked at 48.2 millionreached to 48.2 million as peak and then declineddeclined its proportion bytill 2011 and reachedmet 33.2 million and then the figure rebounded to 45.6 millionthis ratio plunged to 45.6 million in 2012. SimilarlyIn the similar fashion, Berlin Tegel's passenger numbersBerlin Tegel's passenger increased moderatelyincreased with mild tilt until 2008 and then rose sharplyspouted with a steep slope and received 39.9 million travellers in 2009. After that, it served 43.3 million passengersserved to 43.3 million commuters in 2010 and remained unchangedtended with no fluctuation until 2012. The number of travellers using Frankfurt Airportquota of the Frankfurt airport travellers rose steadilymonotonously from 2007 until 2012 with a gentle slope and stood at 69.3 million at last.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response covers all three airports and supports most trends with relevant figures, especially Frankfurt's continuous rise and Berlin Tegel's later plateau. Its main limitation is unreliable precision: the overview overstates total growth, Frankfurt was not highest in every year, and Dusseldorf rose rather than plunged in 2012. Prioritize checking direction and comparison claims against the table, then express them with standard data-reporting language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three airport series are addressed with several correct values, but the overview and the description of Dusseldorf in 2012 contain important inaccuracies.
State that Frankfurt finished highest, note Dusseldorf's 2009 peak and 2012 rebound, and describe Berlin Tegel's plateau from 2010.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves from an overview into airport-by-airport details, but the single dense paragraph and repeated introductory material weaken progression.
Use a separate overview and group the fluctuating series together before presenting Frankfurt's steady increase.
Lexical Resource
The writer attempts varied trend language, but frequent inappropriate choices such as receipted, mild tilt, spouted, quota, and plunged obscure precision.
Use a smaller set of accurate terms such as received, rose, peaked, fell, recovered, and remained stable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is generally recoverable, but frequent errors in articles, verb patterns, agreement, and long clause chains reduce control.
Break the longest sentences into separate time stages and correct forms such as reached a peak, declined to, and rose to.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below highlights data on the number of travellers using three major German airports between 2007 and 2012.
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