The diagram below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009.
Sample Response
TheThe yielded bar chartcharts demonstrate the number of housesHouse built each yearevery year which built in two different citiesdifferent developed areas, Derby and Nottingham, from 2000 to 2009.
Overall, we can clearly see an increasesee increased housebuildinginbuilt house over the periodyear after year. Moreover, more houses were builtmore House built in Derby city than in Nottingham.
For Nottingham, 50 new houses were built in 2000, and this figure rose by 10which rose 10 houses in 2001after one single year. After houses number decline dramatically and in 2000 had 20, in 2000 had the same number as 3 years ago had and continued to grow till 2000 that year 75 houses built and plunge it in 2006 were the lowest built number on account of below 10 and the same number as in 2008. However, between thoseboth years it rose to about 190touched to 180, and in 2009 it reached a peak ofit has on zenith point 250 houses250 built home.
For Derby, had 40 accommodation built-in 2000 which increased slowly and in 2003 number was more than double roughly 110 which remained same for five continue year. In 2008 it was 280 houseshome and reached a peak ofreached to the peak point at 350 houseshouse in 2009.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response's strongest feature is its attempt to cover both cities separately and include several important figures, especially the late peaks. However, the overview misrepresents the fluctuating pattern, several years are incorrectly labelled, and pervasive grammatical and lexical errors make parts of the Nottingham description difficult to follow. Prioritise an accurate two-trend overview and use short, controlled sentences that pair each year with the correct value.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Several key values and the eventual peaks are reported, but the overview wrongly suggests continuous annual growth and repeated year errors reduce accuracy.
State that Derby plateaued before rising sharply while Nottingham fluctuated markedly, then check every year-value pairing against the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion
Separate paragraphs for the two cities provide a basic structure, but the long Nottingham sentence has weak progression and confusing reference.
Present the data in short chronological groups with one clear comparison or change in each sentence.
Lexical Resource
There is some relevant trend vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate choices and collocations such as inbuilt house and zenith point cause strain.
Use a smaller set of reliable chart terms, including rose, fell, remained stable, peaked, and number of houses.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in verb forms, articles, plurals, clause structure, and punctuation sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to recover.
Build complete subject-verb sentences and check tense and plural agreement before attempting longer complex structures.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009.
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