The Table shows how many international students study in Canada and the united states by country of origin.
Sample Response
The Table shows how many international students study in Canada and the united states by country of origin. The tabular data showsdepicts the information about the numbers of international students and percentage changes in enrolmentnumber of scholars and change in their percentage of enrolment from different countriesfrom various nations who studied abroadstudied in abroad countries namely Canada and the United Statesthat is Canada and united states of America inthroughout 2002 and 2003.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that far more of the listed students studied in the United Statesmost of the pupils prefer to study in the united states of America. Indian students are the highest in number of foreigners to seek knowledge from American university whereas in Canada Chinese tutees are the more.
To begin with, inIn Canada, Chinese and U.S.A. scholars are almost the same in 2002 that is 5000 and 5400 respectively. After one yearWhereas, after one year, the numberinvolvement of Chinese students increasedincrease by 45% to reach the no.7850 and students from the USAattenders of the U.S.A. increased by only 9%only incline by 9% that, is 5450. Earlier Indian students were only 2100 in number, but the year after, 35% more Indian students enrolled35% of more scholars enrolled and increased the no. to 2835.
Turning to the United StatesProbing further, in 2002, 110,000 Chinese pupils were reported to be studying in America and the year after this number increased by 6% and reached the number 116,600. Moreover, the number of scholars from India declinedseems to be declined from 2002 to 2003 by 9%, from 200,000 to 182,000by 9%, that is 200,000 to 182,000. The number from 31,000 in 2002 increased to 33,170 in 2003 for Canadian studentsfor the Canadian scholar.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response effectively organizes the information by destination and identifies the dominant origins in each country, with most of the later figures reported accurately. Its main limitation is imprecise language and recurring grammatical errors, compounded by reversing the 2002 China and USA figures for Canada. Prioritize precise data checking and use straightforward terms such as students, increased, and decreased in consistently accurate sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview identifies the main contrasts and nearly all figures are accurate, though the 2002 China and USA values for Canada are reversed.
Check every country-value pairing and include the contrasting total changes of 17% in Canada and 2% in the USA.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overview and destination-based body paragraphs create clear progression, but some linking is mechanical or used in sentence fragments.
Use cohesive devices within complete sentences and make comparisons directly rather than beginning fragments with Whereas.
Lexical Resource
The response shows some range, but repeated forced synonyms and inaccurate collocations often make the wording unnatural.
Prefer precise, consistent terms such as students, enrolment, increased, and decreased instead of scholars, tutees, attenders, and incline.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted and meaning remains generally clear, but agreement, article, capitalization, punctuation, and verb-form errors are frequent.
Proofread each sentence for a finite verb, correct subject-verb agreement, and accurate articles before adding complex clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The Table shows how many international students study in Canada and the united states by country of origin.
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