The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.
Sample Response
The line graph shows male and female gym membership over a thirty-year period. The vertical axis represents the number of members Deletein units of 1,000. The horizontal axis represents the period from 1980 to 2010.
Overall, the graph indicates that there were greater fluctuations in gym membership among men than among women. The number of male members started the period at just over two thousand and reached peakshighs of four thousand in 1985 and five thousand around 2005. The lowest figuresrates were between 1993 and 1997 and more recently in 2010 when membership fellwhen the rate dipped as low as one thousand.
Female gym membership began at a lower level of just over one thousandbegan lower at one thousand, doubled by 1984, and then fluctuated between two and three thousand for the remainder of the period. When male membershiprates were at their lowest, female rates were higher. This was particularly true between 1993 and 1997 when over three thousand women were gym membersheld gym membership.
In brief, there were marked differences in rates of male and female gym memberships in the period covered.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response is well organised and gives a clear, accurate account of the contrasting male and female patterns, with especially effective selection of peaks and broad fluctuations. The main limitation is minor imprecision in the female data, notably the claim that membership exceeded 3,000 between 1993 and 1997. The highest-priority improvement is to check approximate values against the graph more carefully while retaining the concise comparative structure.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and well-selected peaks, troughs, and comparisons cover the main patterns, though a few female figures are slightly inaccurate.
Check the female peak in the mid-1990s and the later values more precisely, describing them as just under 3,000 rather than over 3,000.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report progresses clearly from graph orientation to an overview and focused details, with effective paragraphing and cohesive links.
Remove the repetitive final summary or use that space for one additional direct comparison between the two series.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and precise for trends and comparisons, with only minor repetition of membership, rates, and period.
Refine reference words and vary repeated nouns selectively while preserving the report's accurate trend language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of sentence structures is used accurately, and errors are rare and do not impede communication.
Maintain this control while tightening occasional wording, such as using membership figures instead of rates where absolute numbers are shown.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.
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