The diagrams below show changes that have taken place in the Sawry District neighborhood since 1920.
Sample Response
This pair of maps depicts the information about the course of a century in the awry district neighborhood by showing the area in 1920 and 2020.
Overall, it is clearcrystal clear that the change in the neighborhood is one of growth. By 2020 there wereare more businesses, much more housingmyriad housing. However, not all businesses and services remained from 1920 to 2020remain intact after 1920.
To commence with, BusinessesBusiness and housing show the greatest growthmost change and growth. The cannery shownThe Canary present in 1920 was replaced by an office complex. Two of the houses near the Elmwood Riverriver were demolished and replacedwere demolished replaced by a road and an apartment complexan apartment or complex. MeanwhileAfter that, oak avenue went from having two houses and a shop 2 having three houses to shops and apartment complex and a petrol station.
Furthermore, the change in public services werewas less significant than the change in housing and businesses. Prestwich primary school was demolished and then rebuilt as a bigger school closer to oak street shops. Moreover, the Elmwood RiverMoreover, the elmwood river had a bridge addedgained a bridge and a bike path, the latter of which replaced the small beachsmall beach scene on the 1920 map.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response’s strongest feature is its sensible grouping of changes into business and housing development and public services, with a relevant overview of growth. Its main limitation is uneven factual precision: some quantities are misstated, the cannery is misnamed, and the school’s new location is described inaccurately; several grammatical breakdowns also blur details. The priority is to verify each mapped change systematically and express comparisons in complete, carefully controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A relevant overview and several major changes are presented, but inaccurate quantities, labels, and location details reduce precision.
Check each map feature carefully, including the two apartment blocks, two shops, retained houses, and the school’s actual relocation.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear overview-to-details structure and groups related changes, though some dense sentences make the progression harder to follow.
Separate multi-feature comparisons into shorter sentences and order each paragraph consistently by location.
Lexical Resource
The response shows some range in describing change, but misused or inaccurate items such as ‘myriad housing,’ ‘Canary,’ and ‘apartment or complex’ impair precision.
Use exact map labels and reliable change verbs such as ‘replaced,’ ‘relocated,’ ‘constructed,’ and ‘demolished.’
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of structures is attempted, but frequent missing connectors, malformed clauses, agreement problems, and numeral substitutions reduce accuracy.
Build complete comparison clauses and proofread every sentence for required conjunctions, articles, and correctly written number words.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagrams below show changes that have taken place in the Sawry District neighborhood since 1920.
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