The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009.
Sample Response
The provided table demonstrates the percentage of four different secondary schools, specialist schools, grammar schools, voluntary schools, and community schools children attendance from 2000 to 2009.
Overall, all school’s attendance was fallen year by year except community schools, in 2000 the majority of the percentage was involuntary school while specialist schools had the least through the given period.
For specialist schools, 12% of pupils attended specialist schools in 2000in 2000 had 12% of pupils attendance for secondary education which droppeddrops 1% after half a decadeafter a half decades and fell by the same amountfalls the same percentage in 2009. ForAnd For grammar schools, just under a quarter of pupils attended them in 2000had just below a quarter proportion of learners attendance in 2000, this proportion declinedit declines slightly, and in 2009 it stood at half its starting proportiona half percentage of starting year.
For community schools, pupil attendanceFor grammar schools, student attendance was the same as at specialist schoolswas same as specialist schools in 2000, after that year we can clearly see the rapid risesore, 32% in 200532% of in 2005 and 58% in 200958% of in 2009 which is the highest proportion. For voluntary-controlled schoolsFor voluntary schools, just over half of pupils attended this type of schoolover a half percent of children attended in the school, after that time, it fell by 14 percentage pointsdecreased 14% in 2005 and continued to declinedown dramatically. Had only one-fifth proportion in last year.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response has a clear four-paragraph structure and reports several figures accurately, especially for specialist and voluntary-controlled schools. Its main weakness is data identification: the community-school trend is incorrectly labelled as grammar schools, while the overview contains imprecise claims. The highest priority is to name every series correctly and express comparisons in complete, grammatically controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A recognizable overview and several accurate figures are provided, but the community-school series is mislabeled as grammar schools and some overview claims are inaccurate.
Identify all four school types correctly and compare the dominant shift from voluntary-controlled to community schools with exact figures.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report follows a sensible introduction-overview-details structure, although repetition, run-on sentences, and fragments weaken progression within paragraphs.
Group the two declining categories and the contrasting community-school rise into clearly controlled comparison sentences.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate trend vocabulary, but frequent awkward collocations and incorrect choices such as involuntary school and rapid sore reduce precision.
Use standard data-reporting phrases such as fell to, declined by, accounted for, and rose sharply.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in clause formation, agreement, articles, and verb forms often disrupt fluency.
Write complete subject-verb clauses and check tense, agreement, and article use in every data sentence.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009.
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