The line graph illustrates the number of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007 in grams.
Sample Response
The chart illustrates the consumption of spreadsutilization of spread in grams by individuals over 26 years.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the chart that butter was the topmost ingredient used by people in their meals. Unfortunately, this trend turned negative the next year, while low-fat and reduced spreads were the less popular item over the years.
In detail, butter consumption stoodthe maximum number of people using the spread as a bottle began at nearly 140 g in 1981, and this value increasedinclined by 20 g and touched 160 grams in 19869085. Howevermoreover, this figure then declined sharplythis number increased drastically in Toca nose dive and fell to 60 g in 2001reached Nadir at 60 g in 2001. By 2007following this, butter consumption had fallen by another 10 g to 50 gthe total Kunj option of butter followed plummeted by adding 50g in the final year, and it is interesting to note that around 90 g of margarine was consumed90g of Margarine was swallowed by the people in 1981, and this amount plunged to 80g after five years.
Margarine consumptionSurprisingly this number spiked at 100hundred grams and remained the same until 1996. However, margarine consumptionbut the spread of connection went down sharply to fell to 40 g in 2007hit the bottom add 40g last year. Furthermore, the use of low-fat and reduced-fat spreadslow-fat and reduced parents started in 1996 at approximately 10 gwith shares at a significant nearly 5g, but this value shot up to 80 g in 2001. afterward, this number soared by 20g in 2007.
Why this response received Band 4.5
The response attempts to cover all three spreads and includes some correct figures for butter and margarine, so a basic chronological structure is visible. However, the overview is inaccurate and many details are unclear or wrong, particularly the final movements of butter and low-fat spreads; frequent distorted word choices also obstruct meaning. Prioritize an accurate overview, then report each series with verified years and values in simple, controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response mentions all three series and some correct margarine values, but the overview misidentifies major trends and several years, values, and directions are inaccurate or unclear.
State that butter and margarine ultimately fell while low-fat spreads rose sharply and then declined, checking every figure against the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphs and a broadly chronological approach provide some structure, but contradictory sequencing and unclear references frequently disrupt progression.
Organize the details by spread type and describe each line from its first point to its final point without switching focus mid-sentence.
Lexical Resource
There is an attempt to vary trend vocabulary, but frequent inappropriate or distorted choices such as “bottle,” “Kunj option,” “connection,” and “parents” seriously obscure meaning.
Use a small set of reliable chart terms—rose, fell, peaked, remained stable, and consumption—and avoid uncertain synonyms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some basic sentence patterns are accurate, but frequent malformed clauses, capitalization errors, and faulty verb constructions make several statements difficult to follow.
Write shorter sentences with one subject and one trend each, then check tense, verb form, and sentence capitalization.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph illustrates the number of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007 in grams.
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