The chart shows the fluctuations in the numbers of international students attending the Sydney International Language Centre in 2001.
Sample Response
The line graph expounds the information regarding the scholars who took enrolment in Australia ‘s Sydney’s International Language Centre in 2001.
Overall, the most eye-catching feature is that a lot of fluctuations were observed regarding the students who attended the International Language Centre during the tenure.
As is presented in the line graph, aboutmerely 170 studentspupils were enrolled in the language center during the first two months of 2001. After that, the student attendanceattendance of students plummetedwas plummeted and reached about 130just above 120, in March. In the subsequent months, enrolmentits growth rate increased considerablytook considerably increase and reached the peak of about 185zenith point (185) intill July.
Turning to the rest of the yearMoving further, inIn August, the student attendanceadmission of pupils declinedwas declined and returned to approximately the same levelarrived at the same position recorded in Marchwhich they had had in the month of March. Furthermore, the enrolment of learners increased steadily; 140 and 160 students attendedthe enrolment of learners increased steadily, 140 and 160 students attended the center in September and October month. In the last two months, the scholars who attended the International Language center were Inclined and again reached the same number which they reached in the month of July.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response follows the year chronologically and reports most major movements with generally understandable supporting figures. Its overview is too vague to identify the clearest features, and several descriptions are inaccurate or awkward, especially the claim that December returns to July's level. Prioritise a precise overview of the March low, July peak, and subsequent recovery, then use accurate active verb forms throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most monthly movements are covered, but the overview lacks specific key features and December is inaccurately equated with the higher July peak.
State that enrolment fell to about 130 in March, peaked near 185 in July, dropped sharply in August, and recovered to around 180 by December.
Coherence and Cohesion
The chronological organisation and paragraphing make the sequence easy to follow, although some linking is mechanical.
Group the first rise and the later recovery into two clearly framed periods instead of repeatedly advancing month by month.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in language for trends, but frequent inappropriate choices such as 'scholars', 'zenith point', and 'were inclined' reduce precision.
Use standard chart vocabulary consistently, such as 'students', 'enrolment rose', 'peaked', and 'fell'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied sentence structures, but recurring errors in passive forms, agreement, articles, and word forms weaken control.
Use active trend constructions such as 'attendance fell' and 'enrolment increased' to avoid incorrect passives like 'was plummeted'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart shows the fluctuations in the numbers of international students attending the Sydney International Language Centre in 2001.
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