The graph below shows the weekday volume of passenger activity on the Toronto Metro system for July 2007.
Sample Response
The line graph demonstrates the passenger activityactivities on the Toronto Metro System on weekdays in July 2007for a week in July 2007. The x-axis of the graph shows different hours of the day while the y-axis gives the number of passengers in thousands. Overall, it is apparent from the line graph that passenger numbers on the Toronto Metro system were highestthe highest number of passengers used the Toronto Metro System at 8 in the morning and 6 in the evening. As can be seen, passenger activity on the Toronto Metro systemthe activity at Toronto Metro Station begins at 6 in the morning with 100,000 passengerswith the rush of 100 thousand people and a similar figurea fairly similar pattern was recordedcan be noticed at 4 in the evening. The Toronto Metro, in these two hours, carried the fewest passengersreceived the lowest number of travellers. The passengers rushed in during 8 in the morning and 400 thousand of them were in this metro at that time. A similar number of passengerspassenger used the systemthis subway at 6 in the evening. Moreover, after a sharp fallwith a drastic downfall, the passenger totalthe travellers' number fell to about 200,000reached to about 200 thousand at 10 in the morning. ThereafterMoving further, after a climb to 300 thousand passengers at noonat 12 in the noon, the figure remained stable untilit stabilization till 2 pm before a significant fall at 4 pm. AfterwardsHowever, afterwards, the number continued to risekept on increasing before reaching approximately 400,000reaching to approximately 400,000 at 6 in the evening. From that point, fewer passengers used the Metro and at 10 pm there were roughly 150,000 travellers present on the Metro System.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response follows the daily pattern clearly and selects the two rush-hour peaks, the afternoon low, and several intermediate figures, so the main trends are easy to understand. Its main limitation is minor data imprecision alongside frequent awkward collocations and grammatical errors. The highest-priority improvement is to report the figures with exact comparative language while editing verb forms, prepositions, and singular-plural agreement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview identifies the two principal peaks and the report covers the main fluctuations with mostly accurate data, despite calling the graph a week and rounding the evening peak to 400,000.
Distinguish the weekday daily pattern from a full week and report the 6 p.m. peak as just under 400,000 rather than equal to the morning maximum.
Coherence and Cohesion
The chronological sequence is easy to follow and referencing is generally clear, but the single long paragraph and formulaic transitions weaken organisation.
Separate the overview from two body paragraphs covering the morning and afternoon-evening periods, with transitions based on time rather than stock phrases.
Lexical Resource
There is enough range to describe rises, falls, peaks, and lows, but frequent miscollocations such as 'drastic downfall', 'reached to', and 'rush of 100 thousand' reduce accuracy.
Use standard graph language such as 'fell sharply', 'reached', 'stood at', and 'rose to a peak' with precise nouns.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied sentence structures, but recurring errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and prepositions are noticeable throughout.
Correct forms such as 'a similar number of passengers used', 'it stabilised', and 'at 8 a.m.' before adding more complex structures.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the weekday volume of passenger activity on the Toronto Metro system for July 2007.
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