The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
Sample Response
The line chart illustrates the number of enquiries received byinquiries sent to the Tourist Information Office in a particular city via three means of communication, between January and June in 2011.
It is clear that visitors to the city made more enquiriesinquires in person and via telephone, while letterswritten letters and emails became the least common choices. Additionally, the number of in-person enquiries underwentnumber of enquiries in person experienced the largest change among the three methodsmost dramatic change among the different options.
In January, the Tourist Information Office received 900 telephone enquiries, while just under 800 letters and emails were received. N ot many tourists chose to ask for information in person, with just over 400 queries. Over the next three months, the telephone still remained the most popular method of enquiry, at approximately 1000 queries.
Meanwhile, the number of enquiriesenquires made in person rose considerably to 800saw considerable growth to 800, surpassing the figure for letters and emailsthe figures for emails and postal enquires. From AprilMarch to June, in-person enquiries wereenquires in person were the most common enquiry methodmost common method of inquiry. By June, the number of in-person enquiriesnumber of in person enquires soared by more than 1,000 to peak at 1,900. During this period, there was also a significant rise in the figure for telephone enquiries, from 1,000 to 1,600from 1000 to 1600. By contrast, fewer people sent emails or letters to make enquiriesenquires, with slightly less than 400 enquiries in both May and June400 enquires in May and June.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The report presents the overall trends clearly and supports them with well-selected figures in a logical sequence. Its main limitation is timing accuracy: in-person enquiries became the leading method in April, not March, and telephone was no longer the most popular option throughout the stated three-month period. Check crossover points and month-by-month rankings carefully while retaining the concise comparative structure.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends and most key figures are covered accurately, but the report misplaces the point when in-person enquiries became the leading method.
Check the March-April crossover carefully and qualify time spans so every ranking matches the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the overview through early values to later trends, with effective paragraphing and comparison.
Make the chronological transitions more exact so the shift in the leading enquiry method is fully coherent.
Lexical Resource
A sufficiently varied range of trend and comparison vocabulary is used, despite repeated misspellings of 'enquiries' and a few awkward combinations.
Proofread recurring task vocabulary and use consistent forms such as 'in-person enquiries' and 'telephone enquiries'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex structures are generally accurate and meaning remains clear, with only occasional minor form and punctuation slips.
Polish article use, hyphenation, and small typographical errors while maintaining the existing sentence variety.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
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