The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion.
Sample Response
The pie chart delineates how the UAE administration spent the national budget in 2000. It is obvious that social security and health and personal social services received the largest shares of expenditureproportion of incentives from the national budget of AED 315 billion315 billion Dirham' national budget that yearin this year in the United Arab Emirates. As shownAs is presented in the diagram, the UAE administration’s budget in 2000 was AED 315 billion315 billion Arab Emirates Dirham and AED 100 billion of this100 billion of it was allocated to social securitywent on maintaining citizens’ social security. AED 53 billionJust over 53 billion was allocated for health and personal social servicesthe health and social services which was the second largest allocation by the UAEUSA government. Budget allocationsallocation for education, defence and debt interestinterests were 38, 22 and 23 billion Dirhams respectively. The housing, heritage and environment sectorHousing heritage and environment sector was allotted AED 15 billionallotted 15 billion Dirham which was 6 billion higher than the allocation for transportation. The UAE government allocatedshared only AED 9 billion, the smallest allocation9 billion Dirham, the least, to transportfor its transportation sector in 2000 while other expenditure received AED 23 billionother expenditure accounted for 23 billion.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response accurately reports most major allocations and clearly identifies social security and health services as the two largest areas. Its main limitations are the omission of two smaller categories, the mistaken reference to the USA, and awkward wording within a single undeveloped paragraph. Prioritise complete category coverage, precise institutional references, and clearer paragraphing while retaining the effective use of figures and comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and mostly accurate figures cover the major spending areas, though law and order and industry, agriculture and employment are omitted.
Include the two omitted categories and correct the reference to the UAE government so the visual is represented completely and accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the largest allocations to smaller ones, but the whole report is presented as one paragraph.
Separate the overview from a grouped detail paragraph and use comparisons to connect related categories more explicitly.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary such as allocated, allotted and accounted for shows range, although incentives, maintaining social security and shared are imprecise choices.
Use precise chart-reporting collocations, especially allocated to, expenditure on and spending category, while avoiding unsuitable synonyms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the data clearly, despite recurring agreement, possessive and punctuation errors.
Check noun phrases and subject-verb agreement carefully, particularly plural allocations, currency expressions and commas in category lists.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion.
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