The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events.
Sample Response
The table illustrates four reasons why adults in the UK have attended arts events over the past twenty years. The mainmajor reason over the whole twenty-year period was a desire to see a specific performer or artist, while; while the least commonimportant reason was attending arts events for work-related reasons.
The percentage of people who attended events to seeattended events out of a desire to see a particular performer has remained relatively stable throughout the twenty-year period, varyingperiod; varying from 58% twenty years ago to 56% today.
On the other hand, the percentage of people accompanying children has increased substantiallyshown a significant increase, from 9% 20 years ago to just under a quarter today. As far as those who attended arts events because of special occasions or celebrations are concerned, the percentage fell by seven percentage pointsfell slightly from 27% 20 years ago to 20% a decade ago, before dropping to 9% todaydropping dramatically to 9% today.
There has been a slight increase in the percentage of people attending arts events for work or business, from 6% 20 years ago to 11%just over 10% today.
Overall, there has been a rise in people attending events in order to accompany children and for work-related reasons, while fewer people choose to attend an arts event as a form of celebration.
Why this response received Band 8.5
This response presents an accurate, well-selected account of all four reasons, with a clear overview and effective comparisons across the twenty-year period. Its main limitation is that some trend descriptions omit intermediate figures, although the selected data still support the key patterns. The best refinement would be to integrate the ten-year values more consistently while maintaining the concise, controlled presentation.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response fully addresses the task with an accurate overview and well-selected figures for every reason.
Include the ten-year figures for accompanying children and work or business to make the trend coverage even more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically organised, and its paragraphs and linking expressions make each trend easy to follow.
Group the two rising categories together more explicitly to sharpen the comparative structure.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and precise, with effective trend language such as remained relatively stable and significant increase.
Reduce repetition of percentage of people by varying the sentence structures used to introduce figures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of sentence forms is used accurately, with only a minor punctuation lapse before while.
Use a comma rather than a semicolon before a dependent while-clause.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events.
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